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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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She forms here close in front of me We fall forth into fantasy Here there is no living sun So true our day is never done We can love each other since Here there is no consequence No action met with shamed remorse No loving touch with guiding force Where we met upon the wall Now is swept in waterfall Where our names were carved in stone Mountain peaks are overblown Rocks are thrust up from the ground So we play and make no sound For nothing lives in fantasy I’m glad you came to be with me [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-11-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Walt, I like this very much......fantasies can be great, but nothing beats the real thing  great poem |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
It reads like a dream to me...one where there is no right or wrong...just love to last forever |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
great rhythm and flow! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely wonderful Walty Maree "little miss understood |
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WhiteDragon Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 70O-town, Fl |
Nice flow, nice thoughts. Thanks, Jeremy |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Love it Walt..and the music.. Pink Floyd huh haa..i peeked.~Victoria~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very nice...fantasy and reality...love the way you wove your way to the ending |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
its amazing what sound does to words. this is perfection. it brings this one alive. youve done an awesome job here. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
What a great poem! Wow, came out of fantasy to recognize the significance of reality through your thankfulness..... this is beautiful as is your true life realationship is I'm sure. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very nice Walt. Great Write Rich |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I never said thanks to any y'all hehehe thankies aloties |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Walty- I love this...caught me up in the fantasy you did. This may very well be one of my favorites of yours. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Rae of Sunshine Junior Member
since 2001-07-15
Posts 35Valley of the Sun, Arizona |
Walt, This is beautiful! Kinda gets me thinking about my own fantasies.......... It's fun to get lost in that world every now and then! Awesome writing! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ This is sheer beauty~ I'm glad someone popped it back up - cause I sure missed it the first go 'round~ Beautifully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
big smiles o yuh |
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