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Open Poetry #15

A Short Verse, A Hot Day

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2001-08-21 10:23 AM

The August sweal
I circumvent,
it's unrelent,
it's hell,
lest humid spell
from senses rent
and weak descent
am fell,
the sun's excell
doth implement
and fire dement
impell
to run pell mell
from heat's torment
non-resident,
farewell.

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-08-21 10:26 AM

Adios...and have a cool one for me! This just ran down the page, and now I'm exhausted! Well done!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-08-21 10:45 AM

Well writ my friend. They doan hang around long unless they're rustlers

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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2001-08-21 11:18 AM

Enjoyed the theme and drip of this, like perspiration down the page...not stinky kind, just the perspiring/cooling kind.

Curious...did you mean "sweal"? Don't know that word.

Did you uses extra "l's" in some words for a visual rhyme scheme? Kind of like the playfulness of such, but am still curious about it.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-08-21 12:30 PM

RSWells,
Interesting, enjoyed the read.

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

5 posted 2001-08-21 04:34 PM

Sweal is archaic for swelt or swelter. Thanks for asking.

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

6 posted 2001-08-21 06:53 PM

Good time for ice cream, if you can eat it fast enough. Very well done RS. The heat steamed from the page!

Sincerely,
Rwood

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