Open Poetry #15 |
Crossroads |
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Crossroads might we journey forth this night on our field trip of will’s might beneath scented dusk’s twilight to bask under pale moonlight avenues shall beg our feet winsome stroll long lonely streets moonflowers still smell so sweet katydids shall strum their beat from this chair my will’s not weak moonlit strolls shall I still seek in dreams where you come to peek leaving kiss upon my cheek in my dreams my legs are strong trolling lanes to dance along |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
Nice rhyme and rhythm subject matter and treatment very moving. Very good, Sunshine. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Sissie, the crossroads of life..what wonderful paths they can take us on..very gentle smile |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
This was splendid Sunshine...it is a positive thing when the handicap can still dream at those crossroads...you did this very well! *S* |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
in my dreams my legs are strong trolling lanes to dance along -------------------- Oh....crossroads.....if we could only cross them safely.... You have said it wonderfully...... Thank you ************************ "Oh...me!Oh Life! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Take a bow ! I just LOVE this ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful Karilea ... superb cadence and rhyme throughout this tender and thought filled piece, just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hi sunshiny girl I love this, love the way it flows...beautiful warm write ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Thank you for sharing such lovely thoughts. I could embrace the whole poem in nostalgic roaming. You penned the crossroads with little cobblestones of life. Sincerely, Regina |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sunshine this is very well done! Those crossroads affect all and you have presented this work with such insight! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karilea- Much applause indeed! Wunnerful, wunnerful! I love it. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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