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Mud Lessons |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Brindled mud Slides between toes Bare footedly sunk Into now wet furrows Silky slow sliding Of sole a game To remain standing After the others fall Garden hose In Victors hand Faces losers Who have to Stand Kids games But the lessons The same… Sometimes Its hard to keep From falling And sometimes We get hosed |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
BIG grins on the last lines....no, make that HUGE grins.... and memories are running barefoot now! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Love the metaphor CH---not sure if I was supposed to find humor in it, but I did anyhow...but then, I'm slightly warped. Now, mud wrestling, anyone?  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Deca: Thanks..last line was intended for just that reason...glad it worked Serenity: If you found humor in this...then you also found my warped sense of humor... glad you enjoyed. As for mud wrestling..best two out three or three out of five falls?? No eye gouging, no hair pulling, and no scratching... ready?? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
ah, yes, if you stand in the mud, you're likely to get mucked up...love those last two lines, too!!! but then, if you always stay clean, then what have you experienced in growth and in kindness to others? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(smiling) VAS... we all fall down..and we all collect dirt. Your point is well taken... |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
I enjoy your sparse style and illustrations of life lessons. Nice sense of irony, too. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ Took me back to the rain-soaked clay pits~ Tee-Hee ! Great folly with my brother~ Talk about slippin' n' sliding~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
hehe I love it! Brings back memories for sure. If it rains anytime soon, I will be so happy that I may very well go dance in mud puddles! Thanks for the smile with this clever and deep write!~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
And how! Huge grins here my friend  |
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