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MoonShadow
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since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

0 posted 2001-08-16 05:30 AM

     "Since You Smiled"

Night, was not so dark
    since you smiled.
Life, still had a spark
    for a while.
Faith to show the way;
Hope to light the day;
Help to wind away
    one more mile.

Always taking part
    meek and mild.
Still a gentle heart
    like a child.
Sad eyes washed with tears,
aged with countless fears,
many lonely years
    since you smiled.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-08-16 08:50 AM

Ken, this sounds like a lovely tribute to an older person....I enjoyed! Thank you!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-08-16 08:54 AM

nicely done.. I enjoyed

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-08-16 10:16 AM

Moonshadow,
Love simple poetry.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2001-08-16 12:20 PM

enjoy

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-08-16 01:19 PM

this is bittersweetly beautiful
and the rhyme scheme is cleverly and well done.
well written piece MoonShadow
jm

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

6 posted 2001-08-16 05:27 PM

Ken,

Very cool style.. I liked it alot

Well written as well

TaraB

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

7 posted 2001-08-19 11:48 PM

i like this..got a sad feel..but well written

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"i believe we are here for a reason.
as each day unfolds,
we see less of the shadow
and more of the sun" -unknown

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

8 posted 2001-08-20 12:07 PM

I like this, it paints a character picture of older person who lost the zest..yet their's still hope for a smile. Good write.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2001-08-20 08:54 PM

Love this style of writing...
Feel like I could use a hug.
Well done! Nancy.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12

Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

10 posted 2001-08-20 09:04 PM

SMILES ALWAYS SEEM TO MAKE THE WORSE THINGS NOT SO BAD...THANK YOU FOR THIS SMILE...IT HELPED ME REMEMBER MANY SMILES FROM THE PAST.

Julie :)

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

11 posted 2001-08-20 09:18 PM

Very nicely written tribute to someone you care about. Much enjoyed.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

12 posted 2001-08-20 09:52 PM

Excellent read and well written. Enjoyed this very much MoonShadow.

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