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Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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0 posted 2001-08-16 12:28 PM


What has become of our marriage
that was once filled with so much love
We've become lost in the loneliness
of one another
We have become strangers
merely living under the same canopy -
void of love

Love has long since departed
no longer to be found at this address
My mind desperately searches
for distant memories of us
when we first met merely as friends
only to see love bloom into
such a beautiful bouquet

The flowers of love have now wilted
and blown away with the wind
Maybe we should end this union
between us before we start
to resent each other
and the strangers we have become

But maybe we can just lower our masks
one last time in the hope that
we may catch a glimpse of
the look of love
we once saw in each others eyes

Suetang

© Copyright 2001 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2001-08-16 12:32 PM


Suetang--this happens so often..you have shown how very sad it is with your words.
Logan
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2 posted 2001-08-16 02:17 AM


Ahh, Sue, you have said so well what so many have thought, so very well done..very gentle smile
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2001-08-16 08:32 AM


tough realizations...but it may be possible the love is not gone..but merely covered with layers of living...and that they can be peeled back...to reveal again what you once felt and had.. I hope so...but if not.. then yes parting before the resentment and bitterness takes hold could at least allow there to be a friendship... perhaps...

Nicely said...


catalinamoon
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4 posted 2001-08-16 08:39 AM


Sue, I have to tell you, I am right there with you. It is sad to see it happen, but I don't know if it can be pulled back to the beginning. It seems not, in my case. Good luck.
Nice write.
Sandra

Victoria
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5 posted 2001-08-16 09:34 AM


you are not alone hon..hugs..heartfelt

                  ~Victoria~

nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2001-08-16 09:41 AM


I liked Logans response the best..maybe it is  just covererd by layers of living..

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Decaflame
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7 posted 2001-08-16 09:47 AM


Sue, if this is more than a poem, then do all you can to make sure that every step forward is one that will be mutually important...

I know that sounds a little awkward, but sometimes we just go through those "cycles" and as Logan says, perhaps you can get through the living to find one another again...

you are in my thoughts and prayers...

Krawdad
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8 posted 2001-08-16 04:27 PM


A difficult place to be, indeed.
Layers of living, yes, but more than that I think.
Taking each other for granted, not paying attention, not even noticing . . .
And we change, we grow, but maybe in divergence and not together.
And I think loneliness is always there, beneath everything else.
Not to mention the physiology of aging . . .

I enjoyed your treatment of this difficult topic.

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it."     Wendell Berry


JamesMichael
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9 posted 2001-08-16 09:18 PM


I think when we fail to appreciate what we have and act accordingly we are in danger of losing what we have...and sometimes that is totally out of our control because we only have possession of our actions...James
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