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Butterfly Conspiracies
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Butterfly Conspiracies |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
Interminable unfurling, the empty husk still clinging to the temporal edifice; waiting for the liquid veins to congeal and extend, fanning out the papery hue-filled wings. The cobalt space gathers florescence to explore, rainbows to belay. In the final hour of metamorphosis, the anticipation is sharpest, cutting through the remnants of our hopes, razors skimming across the rind’s outer layers. Errant breezes flicker the emergent projections, stridently questing. It’s what we don’t get enough of that drives our lusts; desperately striving to break our hearts. Perspective convergences flaunt our limitations, our eagerness to underscore and vivisection our lives. It is not as if the struggle has made us any stronger. Comprehending these novel sensations, realizing that we have just attained another rung of vulnerability. Invited more catastrophe into our world, opened up our hearts, stilled the criticisms. And for what? More tears shed while lunging forward, the scenery blurring. This yearning permeates us, transfixes the clarity while the conflagration, the holy fire of passion, encompasses. Insolent in our radiance, we brandish our aspirations, forgetful of the yawning pit ready to drag us downwards. If this burning does not cease, we shall all be ashes soon. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful language use here..and the message quite well delivered... I think I am going to enjoy your posts... I sure did this one... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It’s what we don’t get enough of that drives our lusts; desperately striving to break our hearts. Perspective convergences flaunt our limitations, our eagerness to underscore and vivisection our lives. It is not as if the struggle has made us any stronger. Comprehending these novel sensations, realizing that we have just attained another rung of vulnerability. Invited more catastrophe into our world, opened up our hearts, stilled the criticisms. And for what? More tears shed while lunging forward, the scenery blurring. This yearning permeates us, transfixes the clarity while the conflagration, the holy fire of passion, encompasses. Insolent in our radiance, we brandish our aspirations, forgetful of the yawning pit ready to drag us downwards. If this burning does not cease, we shall all be ashes soon. =============================== Absolutely amazing... Ive read this 3 times...and I dont know which impresses me more... the imagery is awesome...the vocabulary makes me feel poetically inadequate *smile* the employ of metaphor and elemental comparisons gave this such an edge of intelligence..(as did the vocab) and the emote aches off the page... very very impressive writing... you had me from the title  this one goes in my library so that I may learn from its gifts. and again...welcome. jm Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Comprehending these novel sensations, realizing that we have just attained another rung of vulnerability. Invited more catastrophe into our world, opened up our hearts, stilled the criticisms. And for what? More tears shed while lunging forward, the scenery blurring.' I second that...this is extremely impressive and some serious imagery...I will definitely keep this to read a few more times...excellent work!! sp  can I see my world without you in it? |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
Thank you, Cpat Hair, Janet Marie, and snowpants. I appreciate your comments (in fact, I'm a bit overwhelmed by them). MS |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
some very strong metaphors and images, really enjoyed this one. shadows flicker sweet end tame |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
You shouldn't be overwhelmed by the compliments, with writing like this, you are going to attract the best readers... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetsGuild~ Quite powerfully image-laden~ 'The cobalt space gathers florescence to explore, rainbows to belay' Most enjoyable~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
Thank you for stopping by and commenting, citizenx, Lady In White, and Marge Tindal. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Wonderful bursting forth from the innocence of struggle, just to find the world a tougher place to be. But the beauty is still, in the trying! Fabulous write. Extremely enlightening and strong. More! Sincerely, Regina |
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