Open Poetry #15 |
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When I Said I Love You |
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WhiteDragon Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 70O-town, Fl ![]() |
when i said i love, i swear that it was true, and when i said forever, that's what i'd planned to do, i guess i AM a liar, but i never meant to be, i was blinded by your beauty, i guess i couldn't see, see that things could change, in the the blinking of an eye, i never meant to hurt you, can't stand to see you cry, you say you don't believe me, that my love was never real, but you know i always tell you, exactly how i feel, and now i'm saying this, from the bottom of my heart, that our love can be no longer, thought we both did our part, i really hate to say it, but what we had is done, i truly thought that maybe, you could be the one, but times have changed and so have i, there's nothing left to do, and i hope you won't forget me, even though we're through, the times we had, the good and bad, the love I had for you. Jeremy |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sometimes its hard to hold onto the good memories...the hurt and the anger get in the way...nice write Jeremy |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
it does take some time....there needs to be healing time, and forgiving time....eventually, the good memories are what we all try to remember ![]() ![]() |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
yep, but it's really hard for the one left behind, eventually the good times, good memories surface for the one who stayed, I wonder if they hang around at all for the one who does the leaving... written well |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
WhiteDragon - how true this writing is. To love, to be true, and then it's gone, and perhaps never knowing why... BC |
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WhiteDragon Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 70O-town, Fl |
Hey all, thanks for your replies and support. I love you guys *tear* hehe...ooh, look, my 50th post! ![]() |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... it is hard not to let anger and hurt get in the way of the good memories.. I enjoyed |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I have found two essential ingredients in ANY relationship: Honesty and Communication. If either is missing... Sounds like you were honest. Truth can "suck", but ultimately, it's the one constant that will remain. Good write, dealing with a difficult topic... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sigh, I can see this one from both sides of the pen. Sandra |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeremy~ Very well said. The memories do stay with you ... and that's a good thing, I think. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I suppose it is best not to say you will love someone forever too soon as it takes a relationship of a long duration to really get in touch with the feelings that will remain after the dust has settled...I find myself thinking these thoughts in the beginning of a relationship before I really know the other person...James |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey there jeremy ![]() ![]() relationships..*sigh* sometimes theyre tough arent they..but keep that communication, that honesty going..just think a while next time, lest you whisper "i love you's" too soon..then you cant be called a liar..(even if youre not one.. ![]() great write.. hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Nicely written, Jeremy...I especially enjoyed the rhyming, how it was not forced...great work... sp ![]() can I see my world without you in it? |
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