Heralds (second Haiku attempt...then I'll leave you alone!)

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Open Poetry #15

Heralds (second Haiku attempt...then I'll leave you alone!)

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2001-08-12 01:01 PM

Heralds

A single leaf falls
yellowish-gold sunlight fades-
fall flies with the geese.

w. james beard, jr.
(c) August 2001
Okay...one more shot and promise to leave you alone...just need to see if I'm getting the feel here....jimmy

oops...changed "Single petal falls"
to "A single leaf falls" for those who have read it already...makes more sense I think.

j.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-12-2001).]

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2001-08-12 01:19 PM

As far as I can tell, you have it down perfectly.
Thanks for the note on my other poem, and I'm sorry you have had this sadness as well.
Sandra

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-08-12 01:46 PM

JWesley~
I love it !
And ... you'll keep on doing them ...
cause Haiku has a way of coloring your thoughts in simplicity~
Great exercise for writers~

Most enjoyable~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

3 posted 2001-08-12 02:13 PM

jwesley,

A great attempt it is

I hope to see more

I love haiku.. both to read and to write.

TaraB

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

4 posted 2001-08-12 02:32 PM

don't give up its nice...helen

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