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A deep breath in a shallow world
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A deep breath in a shallow world |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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I'd like to think the world's not ill and not abrink the devil's will, nor it in sync a crying shrill about to drink death's sleeping pill. Then I breathe the fouling air and watch us sheathe a future there, as anger seethes forgetting care our heirs bequeathe forlorn and bare. Taint the water, litter shores, shrinking fodder, people more, getting hotter, ozone's tore, tensions tauter enter war. Screw tomorrow live today from it borrow let "them" pay, forget sorrow, dare not pray, watch as we throw all away. Greed denies and won't replace clear blue skies we now deface, is this wise lost human race? We comprise earth's last disgrace. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
powerfully cryptic, it bites |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I still have hope that all will turn around... only when we give up, is it too late... |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
You have a good view on what the world is coming to and I like the way you portrayed it! All we can do it pray... Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well this was a great reminder to care Richard, and well done it was as usual. ~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~This does bare teeth, sharp and frightening. Well written reminder to take notice and action. *Peace poet. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Well put, Is't our place to turn this around for future generations. I prey that it can be done! Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
It's called "The Quickening". To some, "Armageddon". It's very real and very now, and although we "can't change the world", we can change ourselves and live by example. If enough people do this, the "ripple effect" can swell into a very powerful wave, indeed. I think we in this forum are all making waves in our own tiny ways, and THAT is what can help to balance out at least a little portion of this Reality Canvas you have painted here. Accurate and chilling work, Richard. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I enjoyed the clever rhyme scheme here..and the way you carried it out with the vocab choices of vivid sharp imagery to define your poetic intend of message. well done jm Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
What a chilling piece of writing you have penned, it gripped me from start to finish, wonderfully written. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
IT's very chilling and very real, I love it! "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Your style is hypnotizing, educating, and packed with wisdom, not to mention a unique talent for artistic deliverance..  .. I really appreciate the message in this read. Thought provoking... Kudos! Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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