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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: Femme-Fatal A misty blue were her eyes A Medusa in disguise Chilling me with icy stare Without a word of declare. She froze me like a hunted prey I could not turn or run away I could not stop my heart in stir So I gave myself to her She wrapped my heart within her stead Turned me tight within its thread Bound me with a lovers tie Fed me with desires high And I succumbed to potent lust She the bread and I the crust And there we stayed the dragon’s lair Over an abyss of air In mist that covers waking morn. In essence under covers dawn. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 08-12-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It is always good to recognize those that see us for who we are... well done Sy! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Femme fatale I knew her well. This was swell. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A misty blue were her eyes A Medusa in disguise ========================== I could not stop my heart in stir So I gave myself to her She wrapped my heart within her stead Turned me tight within its thread Bound me with a lovers tie Fed me with desires high And I succumbed to potent lust She the bread and I the crust And there we stayed the dragon’s lair Over an abyss of air In mist that covers waking morn. In essence hovers breaking dawn. =================================== Well ya cant blame her... I mean how could she resist the charms of Stinky and Randy.. the wit...the wile ... the winkiewinkie style why theres only so much a girl can take  Gawwd I love this poem... Yer so Keeeewwwl  BUT SOMEBODY BETTER TELL HER... she better check herself before she wrecks herself she better heep her Femme-fatal hands off my Sy-babes... or she could find her self needin a chiropracter *L* Hell hath no fury like a jealous Tinkerbell *L* me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great rewrite Seymour and a great poem...so well expressed! You haven't lost that magic touch I see! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, I like this much.. I don't believe I have ever heard the metaphor included here. "And I succumbed to potent lust She the bread and I the crust And there we stayed the dragon’s lair Over an abyss of air" Superb poem. Where is femme-fatale anyway? Sandra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ 'And I succumbed to potent lust She the bread and I the crust' Well .... you sure toasted this one, my friend~ Nobody butters us better than you do ! Delightful ! ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sy - You're wunnerful... What a romantic..  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thank you *L* RSWells, Isn't it, LOL thank you JM, Your answer is so adorable, I'll have to send you an Email tonight. Ethome, Nice to see you posting again, thank you. Sandra, Why she hovers o'er the abyss. Thank you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, Your so butterable LOL *L* & hugs and kisses. Nan, Who could resist being lovable to you. A hug and kiss along with this. *L* |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Ohhhhhh...I loved this line: "She the bread and I the crust" Great visuals in this one! |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I gotta go with the Bread and crust thing too Great write.... Thank You |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janette, Thank you for the nice reply. Zinsser, Thank you for the nice comment. |
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