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RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2001-07-13 09:25 PM

I rise in middle age
and here confess
a past replete with rage
and lonliness,
now rush to suckle sage
writ words express,
committed soul to page
blood's ink I press.

Before my final eve,
my last daybreak,
before I take my leave
to the opaque,
that when my children grieve
me in my wake,
a chronicle achieve
as a keepsake.

Fades the memory
our visage passed,
lest the departee
recalled miscast,
would they only see
iconoclast,
find now poetry
perhaps will last.

And while I would not
dare pose such pretension,
to think that what I wrote's
some new invention,
I'll never fear misquote
'aft life's abstention,
through writing I emote
truth's time's extension.

Elizabeth

Moderator

Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2001-07-13 10:39 PM

Me too, RS.

Flutterwings
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 288
Maine

2 posted 2001-07-13 11:36 PM

Love the flow of tumbling utterance.A solemn read, but well written with much feeling. My favorite line "committed soul to page
blood's ink I press." The imagery is vivid and I love the rhythm. Kudos! Love and peace ((~.~))

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-07-13 11:48 PM

Flutterwings expresses herself very well, and in truth, I was recently asked, "why, what?" with regard to this obsession.

And you, sir...gave one reason.

Well done!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-07-13 11:59 PM

Fades the memory
our visage passed,
lest the departee
recalled miscast,
would they only see
iconoclast,
find now poetry
perhaps will last.

And while I would not
dare pose such pretension,
to think that what I wrote's
some new invention,
I'll never fear misquote
'aft life's abstention,
through writing I emote
truth's time's extension
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I love the vocabulary, phrasing and verbiage in this..
as well as your cadence.
Excellent write of poetic depth
all of yours I have so far leaves me impressed
well done poet sir
jm

Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me the light

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-07-14 02:18 AM

yes, well done, my tongue and brain will never be the same

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