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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2001-08-10 04:19 PM

I Am the Scent of Jasmine

I am not the meadows and valleys of your dreams,
I am the scent of Jasmine that drifts above them.
I am not the golden leaves of autumn
spreading a carpet of pleasure at your feet
I am a small gust of wind that swirled a single leaf
to its earthly bed.

My wings do not soar the blueness of the sky
and descend upon the magnolia of your delight.
I am only the echo of soprano twitters of morning Thrush.

Nor do I blanket your memories
with glittering folds of drifted white.
I am a swirl of wind that lifted an icy flake
and carved it into a delicate crystal star of lace
that will remain in your eye forever.

I am not the sun that warms your garden of pleasure.
I am a current of air that lifted a delicate butterfly wing
to touch every petal of your passion.

I am not the beauty of a rose
but the taste of honeysuckle that remains on your lips.

I do not seek refuge from the darkness of a storm
but dance with joy in little puddle splashes which mesmerize you.
I do not gush down the twisted revines
through rocks of your ambition
but gently splatter puttering drops
on the morning window of your awakening.

You will not remember me in the grandeur of the tall trees,
but in the mountain laurel which marks your footpath
and in the fragrance of earth
and in the last droplets of rain
falling one by one off orange beads of bittersweet.

Everything that remains in the memory of your eye,
which abides in peace in a corner of your heart
or which has lifted your spirit high into billows of white

will have come from the wellspring of my love

Elizabeth Santos

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-08-10 05:05 PM

I too look down when walking, at times, to enjoy that which is underfoot....

well done Lady Santos...

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2001-08-10 07:16 PM

Very beautifully expressed, Elizabeth. This is a joy to the senses! Very lovely!

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

3 posted 2001-08-10 11:15 PM

"I am a swirl of wind that lifted an icy flake
and carved it into a delicate crystal star of lace
that will remain in your eye forever"

Elizabeth...this is why you are the poetress
that you are...such amazing beauty flows in
your weaves, it touches the soul and
breathes the life into the words...turning
it into poetry...breathtaking work~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2001-08-11 02:44 AM

You are something else! This was absolutely fabulous, and I loved this so much I have printed it out again until you get published.

To see real beauty ~ being blindfolded helps! ~* Mysteria *~

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2001-08-12 05:32 AM

Elizabeth-
   This is absolutely gorgeous!
   So many beautiful lines in this...

      "I am not the meadows and valleys of your dreams,
      I am the scent of Jasmine that drifts above them."
      __________________

      "I am a swirl of wind that lifted an icy flake
      and carved it into a delicate crystal star of lace
      that will remain in your eye forever."
      __________________

      "I am not the beauty of a rose
      but the taste of honeysuckle that remains on your lips.">
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      "I do not gush down the twisted revines
      through rocks of your ambition
      but gently splatter puttering drops
      on the morning window of your awakening."

   What a lovely and priceless masterpiece
   you've painted with your words.
   A true pleasure to read.

   Hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

poetsguild
Member

since 2001-08-12

Posts 85
Florida

6 posted 2001-08-12 08:57 AM

Stunning work, Elizabeth. Everyone has already said what I would have, so all I can do is sigh in their wake.

Melissa

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-08-12 01:59 PM

Whether you write in rhyme or free verse...
your every word paints images and visions.
this is indeed very lovely...
both in its imagery and its romantic sentiments...
wonderful poetic intend and inspire Liz
jm

I know no one is to blame
In time youll feel strength when you call my name
I know Ill never hold you again
And I know Ill never be the same
VH

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

8 posted 2001-08-12 05:16 PM

Your responses to this poem are very lovely and warming. Thank you so much, dear friends.
Liz

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-02-17 02:10 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooooo heavenly enchanting, sweet friend, I just love the imagery of nature you create! (kiss on cheek) May the jasmine forever linger in your heart with the incense of beauty, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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