Open Poetry #15 |
Love me Like There is no Tomorrow |
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Love me Like There is no Tomorrow Remember when we were new you loved me with freckles and pale skin in the splash of discovery you dripped your blond laughter into my desperate and I curved around your enthusiasm throwing away buckets of gone by for you loved me like there was no yesterday. We have become a cloth now intricate and fragile with time threaded with this dawn and dusk where we have built trust I can hear you playing in my head long after together has bathed us and even when I sleep I reach across the gorge that takes you flying somewhere else and touch your bruised remember that sleeps with us Cumbersome life weighs on our wings now and takes our wonder like a soft blue egg and threatens to just let it lay in chambers where no joy is made and the wings beat us down to cower in the fear of how Love me like there is no tomorrow darling lock me into seasons spring whisper your breathe on curving ever where the circle in our ring begins and ends [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-09-2001).] |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Beautiful poem Martie. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh Martie, Martie, Martie, this is YOU, this is fabulous writing as everything you do is b ut this, this is passionate! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Martie, this is so refreshing and beautiful! I love your style~ Melissa~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What I see is you growing in your writing like there's no tomorrow! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
So sweet, Martie. This speaks of a growing and special love. Nice write. Sandra |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, if I loved you, there would BE no tomorrow!! Your hubby would whomp me bad!!! (but it's a nice thought...and a terrific poem ) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You just rock ! 'Love me like there is no tomorrow darling lock me into seasons spring whisper your breathe on curving ever where the circle in our ring begins and ends' Yep .... round and round~ Love ya', poetess~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
Martie, you make me feel like a pretend poet. This is just beautiful from beginning to end. I'm gonna go eat dirt now. sigh. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahhh, Martie, Martie, you sing with your words, girl..very very nice..very gentle smile |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie - this poem was second best to feeling that new baby's bottom for the very first time! Now I am not going to explain that to you, I am going to wait until you experience that feeling and then you will know just how absolutely wonderful this poetry was! To see real beauty ~ being blindfolded helps! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Really enjoyed this Martie...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Remember when we were new you loved me with freckles and pale skin in the splash of discovery you dripped your blond laughter into my desperate and I curved around your enthusiasm throwing away buckets of gone by for you loved me like there was no yesterday. We have become a cloth now intricate and fragile with time threaded with this dawn and dusk where we have built trust I can hear you playing in my head long after together has bathed us and even when I sleep I reach across the gorge that takes you flying somewhere else and touch your bruised remember that sleeps with us ====================================== whisper your breathe on curving ever where the circle in our ring begins and ends ==================================== OH MAN!!!! *shaking my head* Marge is right you just ROCK... and I know just how Constance feels(LOL@her reply) (and Balladeer) he needs a good whomping Martie this is just awesome... Gawwwwd I love the way your poetic mind works... What a beautiful, sincere poem of marriage, and commitment over time. both the poem and the inspire leave me with poetic envy... Order me up a dirt sandwich very very cool write me girlie me I know no one is to blame |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You just flew over the coo coo's nest with butterfly wings. Love ya Sy |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Remember when we were new you loved me with freckles and pale skin in the splash of discovery you dripped your blond laughter into my desperate and I curved around your enthusiasm throwing away buckets of gone by for you loved me like there was no yesterday. I have no words to describe how your writing makes me feel Martie. this is going into my library Maree |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"you dripped your blond laughter into my desperate and I curved around your enthusiasm throwing away buckets of gone by for you loved me like there was no yesterday." What a wonderful start love prepares for us all! As the seasons pass our perspective changes and our goals run astray but are always a form of new! "Love me like there is no tomorrow darling lock me into seasons spring whisper your breathe on curving ever where the circle in our ring begins and ends" This clever ending is a delight to the reader as he /she recalls and wishes upon yesterday! Wonderful writing!! As usual!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW! This is fantastic, Martie! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I can hear you playing in my head long after together has bathed us and even when I sleep I reach across the gorge that takes you flying somewhere else and touch your bruised remember that sleeps with us' Your imagery is just outstanding, Martie...this is one excellent write...I truly enjoyed this!! Beautiful illustration of devotion... sp no power in creation, |
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