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While Waiting for Clarity
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While Waiting for Clarity |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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While Waiting for Clarity Waiting for clarity watching the tide listening for lessons from time left behind is this how I spend the mid day of heat beginning the ache of a thought’s incomplete I’m drowning in dignity lost in the fog searching for magical mystical cog that will catch the yearning with tenderness’ hook and wee bit of joyful that fell in the brook You think I’m just messy but the clutter’s defined in the pathway I take to the place that is mine there lashes fall dangerously close to asleep and my dire state of mind does not make me sweep Oh lethargy leave me some jumping around for my feet yearn for dancing and playing the clown often my lips burn with hot state of allure when I think of time wasted on waiting breeze stir I’m taking the slow road to round and about and have figured the distance is making me pout so if you should see some red shoes and blue jeans you can bet its my bippy walking out of your screen If you think this is nonsense your reading your right for my fingers just needed to get out of uptight the seriousness of this wanting to shout is to help me determine what life is about |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
quote: Well you know, my dear, all of the fellows will now want to see that bippy walking out...{smiles}...but how I understand all of this! You're muse is playing with you, and I understand THAT, too! Warm hugs.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, I enjoyed reading this side of you very much  " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
cute, funny, playful- not arty I love this other side of Martie! I'm so glad I didn't miss the day Martie's bippy came out to play. Love it! Hugs. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Without a playful, silly side we are just one-sided.....you, MArtie, are complete. Come on down! You be Frank, I'll be Ernest and we'll search for Clarity together!!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, you are a delight in and out. *L* |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
While waiting for the page to download...I had a preview of what was ahead. As I pondered your title, your face and your poem were finding their way into 'focus'. Perhaps that is what our playful is for, finding a focus upon which to pour. Enjoyed reading your musings. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie,MyFriend~ 'I’m taking the slow road to round and about' Meet you on the corner of Bippy and Rhyme~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Martie, I absolutely adored this side of you, and I hope you let her out more often! We all have to be playful sometime (with me it is more often than not, and I am trying to learn to behave like a Grammie!). Hugs, loved it! ~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Waiting for clarity watching the tide listening for lessons from time left behind is this how I spend the mid day of heat beginning the ache of a thought’s incomplete I’m drowning in dignity lost in the fog searching for magical mystical cog that will catch the yearning with tenderness’ hook and wee bit of joyful that fell in the brook You think I’m just messy but the clutter’s defined in the pathway I take to the place that is mine there lashes fall dangerously close to asleep and my dire state of mind does not make me sweep Oh lethargy leave me some jumping around for my feet yearn for dancing and playing the clown often my lips burn with hot state of allure when I think of time wasted on waiting breeze stir ============================ This is NOT nonsense..this is MAGIC... this is HARMONY and MELODY and CADENCE COOL this is RHYME DIVINE... and bring your bippy here and I'll give it a smooch I LOVE THIS POEM... I LOVE when you rhyme!!  mewont you sing me your poetry |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Creative and delightful, Martie! Yep, I know what you mean! |
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Soaringeagle Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 156CANADA |
MARTIE.....THE OTHER SIDE OF YOU IS SUBLIME YOUR WORDS AND YOUR LINES REVEAL ANOTHER YOU good one martie and i wont tell taylor your a flasher hugs warrior |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Lovely! I haven't read much of your work so I don't know what your other side is but I have enjoyed this poem from the side you are currently showing! You have made me smile with this one ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I think I could figure it out if I could just cool down enough...   |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
"If you think this is nonsense your reading your right for my fingers just needed to get out of uptight the seriousness of this wanting to shout is to help me determine what life is about" Nonsense, no I think not. Martie this brims with wisdom and insight, and you got some get great rhymes going on too. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your fingers were never uptight Neither is your rhyme Beautifullly done In your usual perfection Liz |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
this has a meter and rhythm which often flows through my head with profound insights when i'm trying to sleep and a thousand words roll by and then when i get up to write it down, it either comes out as gibberish or in a string of words i don't know the definition of... hehe... but yours came out beautifully!! i like this a lot... thanks for the read... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady--About my bibby...you think? Thanks for understanding. Kathleen--Glad you enjoyed. Constance--and hugs back for your wee verse. Balladeer--you come over here! Sy--You say the nicest things! VAS--Perhaps you're right..glad you enjoyed. Marge--I waited for you show but you must have decided not to go. Sharon--I know you're a wonderful at just about everything. Janet Marie--If I could make magic what would I do I'd take me a plane to come hug my friend you Denise--Thanks for being so supportive hon! Buck--He already knows.. Krista--So glad I made you smile. Nan--Run through the sprinklers...it's a sure cure. citizenx--thank you for stopping to read and for such a nice comment. Liz--My fingers were ...I swear. So glad to see you!! doreen--I know what you mean about words and sleep...thank you so much for just being so you!! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Martie-Such a delightful play of words and I like how everything sounds together. You are so talented. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
I loved it was a little different from your other poems not better but captivating. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well Martie, this is definitley different, though still enchanting as always m'dear. You're incredible! Maree |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I came back to read it again, and thougth I would tell you that I bet if we added up all the time wasted exactly like this line, imagine the time lost? I know I have done my share for three days it is over 80 here! when I think of time wasted on waiting breeze stir. To see real beauty ~ try closing your eyes! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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