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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Realities made me think of you today... Ambrosia so strong that spoken words can't relay An atmosphere of memory carressing my mind Euphoria suspended in a second of time I felt your presence In the air... It's just as though You were standing right there... Gardens of elation blooming flowers of love Aromatic rapture sent from somewhere above... Sentiments of sadness grow with fading delight As I realize that you are nowhere in sight... Vanished from my life like a fragrant breeze -- Yours for the moment; but never to sieze... (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) circa 1993 "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." --Del Casher [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 08-07-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, for you, an "oldie" and for us? a goodie... well done Sir! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark this a lovely bittersweet beauty... rhyme divine and I loved the vocabulary. The ending impact was perfect poety. very well done poet sir  wont you sing me your poetry |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Mark This was so very beautiful with stunning imagery. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Sunshine -- the scent of "Realities" is ALWAYS a goodie! JM: thank you very much for your kind words. Inspiration comes from many sources, and nothing triggers memories faster than the perfume a loved one wore... Sue, thank you... some realities are better than others... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Who was it that said "Reality Bites"? This is a beautiful poem, and its sad when reality has to hit us in the face, when the memories are so nice. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Sandra, sometimes it seems that Reality bites off more than we can chew... but I guess that's why we're human and have these things called feelings -- so that we can truly understand the essence of things... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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wpwpoet Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 99 |
Mark; love the "ambrosia" a favorite word of mine. I thought "you were standing right there" was long...is the word "right" needed to express the emotion? peace love and understanding...wpwpoet |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Sad......lonely.....and so much longing..... I can almost hear some sad tone played at the background of the images you drew in this one...... I loved it....Mark..... Thank you ****************************** "Oh...me!Oh Life! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
enjoyed the rhythm, flow and message of this piece...nicely done |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Well done, I enjoyed. |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Mark Yes, reality bites, but you have your memories to keep you company and your writing portrays beautiful memories. Enjoyed! |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
A very sweet scented reverie. Some people mark your senses forever. I think it's okay to hold on to that which made them so potent to you. Because the reality is...it will always mean something to you. Even if life goes on. Wonderful verse! Sincerely, Regina What lies behind us and what lies before us |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
wpwpoet: thanks for your response. Actually, the word "right" is very important because not only does it add to the flow of the melody for this song but it also serves to stress the immediacy of the sensation as if she indeed was standing RIGHT THERE -- in front of me/beside me rather than simply just standing... Thanks for the read and opinion though, and I love the word "ambrosia" too. MEM: thank you very much. What you're hearing is the acoustic guitar accompanying the vocal melody, with some synth pads filling the backdrop. Thanks for reading. Thank you, Virginia -- I tried to do the impossible of capturing the scent of my favorite perfume onto the screen/paper with adjectives... Sy: thank you. Ariana, thank you for the read and reply. You are right -- certain memories are very "scentsitive"... Regina, thank you so much... I believe you speak wisely -- it's the good memories which contribute to our essence and joy. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Beautiful! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Connie. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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