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I Have Lost my Splendor
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I Have Lost my Splendor |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I have lost my splendor though I know it curled around me just last night and caught me in a dream delight was the title that tossed me about on my pillow my hair a dark mask across my pale I woke within its dwelling holding still the capture of it winding it with pieces of colored laughter and sealing it with a song the tune was so clear with violin searing across the open space that blinked into the ceiling that I was sure I could play the shuttered instrument that dust covers under the bed I have lost my splendor though I remember how it felt the sea green crash of it around my legs the taste of the salty human it held and I know a fragrance of recall waits around the corner out in the go-beyond with the new mown grass past the rain |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I beg to disagree, Martie. You haven't lost even an ounce of your splendor! You must not be seeing the same person that the rest of us are seeing. In fact, I think you are bordering on spectacular!  Beautiful poem! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very vivid images here, Martie. I'm with Denise, you've lost nothing! All writing comes |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
You've got it, Beautiful poem. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Though I also disagree, Martie, you've penned a great description of this feeling...very nicely written! sp  no power in creation, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No splendor? just open wonder at what would cast asunder any thought that might dispel the cast of Martiesque dwell... my friend, you are magic always.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
-You are all so sweet..now I feel like I was asking for you to tell me I hadn't lost it...when what I was trying to say was that I just have been feeling depleted of excitement of something...sheesh, must be the heat. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well If I FIND IT....IM KEEPING IT!!  It will make for one hell of a muse *L* You and your poetry is Splendor..  mewont you sing me your poetry |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I've been feeling like that lately too, Martie. I guess it's just a part of the cycle of life. Sometimes you feel fulfilled, on top of the world, sometimes you feel bored, sometimes restless, sometimes you feel lower than dirt, most of the time you hover somewhere in between the top and the bottom. Go see a good movie, go shopping, visit a friend. Most importantly, stay out of this heat!! Whatever you do, don't stop writing!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I am speechless, the words here are so vividly real and well, they are open and honest. Martie, you have gained much! Not lost..gained! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Rindercella Member
since 1999-11-12
Posts 64La La Land |
This is so pretty. Your imagery is quite remarkably done. *If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours* |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Martie, it is just out there, there where that rainbow is striking the ground. For only the rainbow could be as beautiful as your words...very gentle smile |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
every now and then, do we not lose the excitement of childish wonder, all too often, perhaps...one thing wonderful about being a writer, we learn to look at things more deeply and can regain that childish excitement/wonder as we ponder the magnificence of God's luscious creation and marvel at how wonderfully it works, when we don't mess with it unnecessarily you have not lost any splendor, Martie, maybe just lie down in the grass, uh-hum, in the shade, and seek the realm of the flora and fauna with seeking eyes, and as delicate as dragonfly wings, surely your wonder will return...yet your words have far from left you...you still know how to sprinkle them on the page to season your writing toward perfection |
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