Open Poetry #15 |
Hurry Evening |
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hurry Evening In the day is searing heat the fountain of serene is beat the sky has sifted out the blue left only pale hint of true A summer sunflower’s falling now its stately stalk broken somehow the bees forage in the grass for hint of moistened sprinkler’s pass Just now I felt a hint of breeze I see the waving of the trees the evening moves across my thoughts when we will swim in moonlight’s toss The flowers then in dusk turned hue will feel the blessed evening’s cool drops of jewels will light my arms as we embrace in darkening charm Hurry evening hurry fast my love is coming home at last |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, this brings a knowing smile...which kind of lead itself into a grin! Lucky fellow! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Hmm, then I hope the evening hurries up..with a pretty full moon no less, geez...very gentle smile for you and him |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I wish you shelter from the heat of day into heated passion of the night ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Like this one, enjoyed!! Throw your heart out in front of you |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Just as I remember it Martie...your writing I mean. Been sporadic in here for quite a while and don't remember hitting any of yours (so many new and wonderful people on here can't keep up when I do get back...home) But...just as I remember it...just as beautiful and truthful as ever...I love seeing through your eyes... jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-05-2001).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah, is there anything that I love better than reading "love" through your words and visions, so tastefully and delicately done, no, there isn't! I simply adored this Martie, and psst...have fun too! ~To see real beauty you must first look with your heart~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A summer sunflower’s falling now its stately stalk broken somehow the bees forage in the grass for hint of moistened sprinkler’s pass Just now I felt a hint of breeze I see the waving of the trees the evening moves across my thoughts when we will swim in moonlight’s toss The flowers then in dusk turned hue will feel the blessed evening’s cool drops of jewels will light my arms as we embrace in darkening charm ================================== MARTIE RHYMED!!! and its divine... and not even the confines of cadence can keep your pen from painting the scene to poetic perfection... I LOVE this poem of anticpation and romantic inspire!! jm slow burn ... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Aw, Martie, I love this, the rhyme, flow and sentiment is perfect! So lovely, it's a keeper~ Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm glad I didn't miss this one! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
martie, you work is wonderful...makes one glad that love is still alive and well, even if it is at your house instead of mine |
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