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Forever's Mist
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Forever's Mist |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Forever’s Mist The names in truth do not matter Eve, Delilah, Jezebel, I Offer three, with mine the latter With no excuse for in its spell One gave the world its paradox Jezebel, tolls the rope of hell Delilah sheered a mind its locks. I ask is this a place to dwell? We are born to a commitment There is no life without this deed And also bound by laws cement. A wed of kind for natures seed. And though we flit flower to flower Collecting nectar for our hive We never quite gain its power Or understand why we’re alive. I question brimstone and atone I question unknown and alone? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
and He'll survive the questions...but will we? powerful post, Sy! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, Sy, your randy dragon is going deep here. I love the way you think and express it in verse~ Melissa~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We are born to a commitment There is no life without this deed And also bound by laws cement. A wed of kind for natures seed. And though we flit flower to flower Collecting nectar for our hive We never quite gain its power Or understand why we’re alive. I question brimstone and atone I question unknown and alone? ============================ Great minds question everything... but there is NO questioning what a gifted poetic mind you have... this proves my point for me... I've run out of adjectives to describe your work... so I'll simply sit here and inhale every word, seek the wisdom of every rhyme, and shake my head in awe. OH and then throw ya couple *winkiewinkies* *L*  me |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, Nobody survives the question. Thanks. Melissa, Thanbk you sweet Melissa. *L* JM, Caught the winkiewinkies Love ya Stinky. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy, like you I question too, and sometimes find a common mind, like word or two of poet you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Gotcha, *L* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"We are born to a commitment There is no life without this deed And also bound by laws cement. A wed of kind for natures seed." "I question brimstone and atone I question unknown and alone?" Beautifully written Seymour. This brings wonderful ponderings to mind ... you are not alone in the questioning. I so enjoy the flow and style of your work, very much enjoyed this piece.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The answers to those questions are as unique as the questioners... for alone and lonely need not be synonymous... Nicely done, my guy Sy... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Keep the questions coming, and we will keep opening the book of knowledge... Well done Sy! |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
AAAAhhhh, a person with the courage to ask the hard question---and face the answer his heart gives! Admirable and well-voiced. |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
We are born to a commitment There is no life without this deed And also bound by laws cement. A wed of kind for natures seed. And though we flit flower to flower Collecting nectar for our hive We never quite gain its power Or understand why we’re alive. I question brimstone and atone I question unknown and alone? I understand not understanding. I like your poem very much - the title is an invitation to read I'm glad I answered. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Always delight in what you write. Nan, Your my gal, *L* Sunshine, Just keep shining, *L* Constance, Thank you so much. Illusion, The title could also be, Forevers Mith, Thank you. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
In the face of my idealism and optimism, it unforunately seems that in today's world, the "doctrine of indoctrination" which is marriage is nothing more than a piece of paper with materialistic benefits and a short path to the inevitable complimentary piece of paper which negates all that the first predicated... Jaded? Better believe it. What matters to me is the core construct of the other person -- not the expectations, judgements, and mandates of a shallow society. Strong write, by the way... ;-> -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This certainly made me think. I just don't know how to respond to it! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Mark for the frank comment.. Irish, Not to worry, thanks for the read. |
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