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Again He Has Gone
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Again He Has Gone |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet 
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Again he has gone. And I cry for this love That brings with it so much pain And I welcome the rain. Again he has gone. And I wish for the end Making my heart fill with shame And I welcome the rain. Again he has gone. And all is returned So that it all seems in vain And I welcome the rain. Again he has gone. Perhaps for the last time And my body feels the strain As I welcome the rain. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
oh, there's seems to be so very much between the lines...it seems your heart needs comfort as well as your words saying you want the cleansing of the rain, the washing away of sorrow and pain |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
painful emotions in this..well presented.. good write |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
VAS ~ thank you for understanding...you are very insightful. Cpat ~ I don't usually do poems like this but my mood at the time called for it! Thank you both for reading and commenting  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I think the most painful part in all this is the word "again", implying that cycles are being repeated... Perhaps the sun or wind should be welcomed this time...? A heart-felt write, Krista. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the rain washes all away. . . for the last time. . . I liked the repeated phrases in this poem. . . gave the reader the idea that this has happened before, but that it would not happen again, that the rain would take it all away. . . and bring the sun. . . great job with this. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Mark ~ exactly Mark, it is the repetition that I wished to emphasize. Thank you for your insightful comments and read Sven ~ that is a good way of looking at it. It is open to interpretation of course. I'm not sure at the time if I was as optimistic |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
The state of your smittenness is difficult to dispute with these strong words. I strongly hope that such an intelligent and talented person can find a happier love in the not-too-distant future. *hugs* Teddy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sad but good when you can come to the place where you want no more pain or nonsence and can prepare yourself to move on...James |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Beautifully written! |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Teddy ~ awww thank you, that is a very kind thing to say!  Hugs back James ~ exactly...it took me a long time to get here...and I haven't even taken the final step yet if you know what I mean...but I'm prepared now at least! I think... hehe, thank you for your comments and read much appreciated.Walker ~ thank you! [This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 07-19-2001).] |
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