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Open Poetry #15

Falling

AJ Keating
Junior Member

since 2001-05-10

Posts 26
New Hampshire

0 posted 2001-07-12 10:49 PM

Still playing with the formatting on this *shrug*


Fa          Fa
  l        .  l
    l     .     l
     i   .       i
      n .         n
      g           g

through the void,
landing softly on a bed
of pinecone death.
Running wildly
down the crimson shores
Til I find myself 
beneath her breasts.

"...apathy isn't it...we can do something. Ok, so flower power didn't work, so what? We start again." John Lennon

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-07-13 12:48 PM

now that's unusual, I didn't expect the ending and am wondering what it signifies

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-13 08:55 AM

Well Aj... thatis creative...

like the poem

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-07-13 08:57 AM

I receive many images from this...first the format, then the wording, then the internal visuals received....

enjoyed!

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

4 posted 2001-07-13 06:04 PM

I like pinecones. I like to pick them up and carry them when I walk in the woods. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-07-13 11:21 PM

I like this one. Your style reminds me of Cummings. He's always been a favorite of mine for the he could play with words. Nice write.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

6 posted 2001-07-13 11:24 PM

very cool! i'm impressed..

hugs, g

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

7 posted 2001-07-14 01:59 PM

Adam, I really like the rhythm of this poem. Very Creative...

*smiles*
~Tier{R.T.}

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