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Our romance once sang
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Our romance once sang |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
Our romance once sang a Motown bliss, my baby love. I touched you a thousand times imagined, softly pressed upon your breast, counting Tenneson's Summers washing your feet with rose petals. There I treasured your very word spoken or silent, except the last. Our romance once sang a melancholic ballad. For you questioned happiness, having drank from the callous abyss. Perhaps, it was me, making a promise too many, maybe the only one you remember was the only one I could never keep. Once our romance sang dulcet laughter across the telephone. Even from November's icy infamy until now, You fed me future fancies. All that time, you even called me from his house! "Separate beds" I joked secretly praying, "I sleep alone. There is no room for him in me." If only that were true, So no love was exchanged, and still It was a cold pleasure and it was a broken betrayal. Our romance now sings Leonard Cohen's "Hallelujah", Cold and broken, no Hallelujah. "And resentment rides high, but emotions won't grow And we're changing our ways, taking different roads" ian curtis |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is a very good entrance for a first post! Welcome to Passions! Check your e-mail for a special message! Karilea |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
I like the line 'I sleep alone. There is no room for him in me.' |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Welcome to Passions!  this is a lovely first post....I look forward to reading more from you!~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Yep, a great first post! Loved this. Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the only one you remember was the only one I could never keep. Once our romance sang dulcet laughter across the telephone. Even from November's icy infamy until now, You fed me future fancies. All that time, you even called me from his house! "Separate beds" I joked secretly praying, "I sleep alone. There is no room for him in me." If only that were true, So no love was exchanged, and still It was a cold pleasure ============================ this is achingly beautiful, a soulful, sincere write of the heart... well done on the imagery and vocabulary as well, Welcome to Poetry Land!! nice to have you here with us, take care jm slow burn ... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I love the last lines. . . what a heartbreak. . . well done. . . welcome!! please take a look around and stay awhile. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It seems that I am late in saying, welcome to passions. You write well and with heart. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
very sensuous " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Citizenx, I am very pleased with this piece, the collection of time and passed thoughts, wonderful first post, hope to see more of your work. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
I wish there was some way in which I could express how much the warm welcome I have recieved mean to me, but honestly words fail me. All I can say is THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. shadows flicker sweet end tame |
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