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Miranda
Junior Member

since 2001-07-26

Posts 32
OOOOOklahoma!

0 posted 2001-07-31 01:34 PM

oh my, was this ever hard to do my dear Mysteria. You challenged me to write a poem for this picture and I have accepted it. **Pauses to wipe the sweat from my brow.**

The Seduction Of Darkness

He wanted my attention ... and I gave it.
He wanted my body ... and it was his.
He wanted my love ... and I never questioned
He wanted my soul ... and it was too late to fight

Now, you see me as he left me--ice in my veins,
a coldness in my eyes and the only warmth
of blood’s flow that I will ever know,
is as it runs the length of my chin
after feasting.

You judge me by the paleness of my skin,
and the sharpness of my bite, but I am
a woman still. I have needs and grow weary
of the aura that surrounds me and the heavy
crown of darkness I am burdened with.

Yes, I am a woman and within this bosom
echoes the sounds of a heart long destroyed
and I can hear its memory with every
taunting beat.

Come closer ... listen ... can you hear it? No?
Come closer ... let me wrap my arms around you
and remember what it feels like to be of flesh
that can moisten from passion once more.

Wipe the imagined tears that I cannot shed
from my face, and tell me you see the
fragileness none others can see within
this shell.

Love me, if you will, let that be my salvation.
And forgive me, as I rain my kisses of
gratefulness upon your neck.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2001-07-31 01:40 PM

Miranda,
Elegant write, I enjoyed the lines and inbetween the lines.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-07-31 02:10 PM

I think you matched the spirit of the poem
very well.

Gloom

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-07-31 02:58 PM

Okay, okay so you can write, what's your point? Lol, oh this was simply stunning Miranda, you captured her essence perfectly. Bravo! You won!

Miranda
Junior Member

since 2001-07-26

Posts 32
OOOOOklahoma!

4 posted 2001-07-31 04:40 PM

Mysteria I think we were too quick to call the winner on this little game, seems we have more poets joining us. yippee! Dying to see what everyone sees when they gaze at her dark eyes and how they can get it across in words.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2001-07-31 04:49 PM

nicely met... and well told indeed... this too I enjoyed

another version perhaps for those who prefer rhyme..

No beauty but the cold
And hunger for the taste
Lives in this form of old

Silent stalking eyes behold
The merely mortal man
Wishing in lust to fold
Them into her again

No beauty but the cold
And a hunger never sated
Makes this one bold

Enticing body swaying
In dance of promised lust
Lures them into staying
Forgetting not to trust

Wishes should be made with care
Lest you find they do come true
And caught within her lair
This fate also befalls you

No beauty but the cold

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 07-31-2001).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2001-07-31 05:17 PM

I see that - great! CPat met it beautifully, go get him girl!

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