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Ms. Sunkissed's daughter...
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Ms. Sunkissed's daughter... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
For Summer, born on the first day of... Girl, Your smile blazes 'cross my heart like SUMMER's august deep and hot burning my eyes happy turnin' my smile on so I can't shut it off You're almond shaped eyes, large & brown dance brandy/amber two butterflies invitin' & they go a chasin' but never catchin' you know what you be doin' Your skin, carmel smooth reminds me of latte & must be as tasty for I've seen'em beggin' but you just smile that beguile carryin' on til dawn Girl, Your love swarms around me warm like a forever quilt filled with soft down it's all around, me, you, ours, we family, just shines Ms. Sunkissed's daughter whenever you smile... ~Tier 7/01 [This message has been edited by Tiersdin (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
filled with the sweetness of orange blossoms well now, after I read and commented, you upped the print...that made it even sweeter, for sure!!! [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is great Tier. . .  I love the flow of it all. . . right from the first "Girl. . ." all the way to the end. . . I was wondering about this: quote: and was wondering if you hadn't meant "your" here. . . but, as I read it again, it could also be read to say that Summer is almond shaped eyes, large & brown. . . so. . . leave it. . . it works both ways. . . Beautiful. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tiersdin~ Absolutely captivating~ Greatly enjoyed the flow. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Tier...James |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
Wow! You can't learn what you do Tiersdin, you are gifted. How wondeful that you took the gift, polished it, and shared it with us. Thanks. |
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ShannonM Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 104Drifitng |
Very nice! This ryhthym carries at a nice tempo all the way through. ShannonM |
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1slippery_lady Junior Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 20Ohio, USA |
This is so sweet, it really gave me goosebumps. Very lovely poem  |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Thanks everyone for your kind comments! I deeply appreciate it! *smiles* ~Tier |
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