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Windsurfing |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Windsurfing I cannot bear witness to your vanishing, this vestige, a faceless touch, once solid. Soon, no amount of unearthing will verify your existence. With each plane of exodus, you drift, from weight of water to vapor. This decision winnowed in on prevailing winds, realized with a finality one spring day, with a finger’s snap, pictures of simplicity pierced through intricacies, a calling higher than ground could hold. A part of the earth, but apart from it, gathering love about you, windsurfing on a williwaw, to a locale known only to God. © 2001 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very touching, Corinne. Creatively expressed. Well done. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Denise! Corinne |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this. Real feelings. Something I can't quite pin down. Very good. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Nicely none. It was very descriptive and It's something I would love to try. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
good strong descriptive phrasing, Corinne, a pleasure to read. " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Yes, you did it very well indeed, Cor, hon..very well...very gentle smile |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Mirror Man, Shadow, Irish Rose and Logan. A subject near and dear... Cor |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ 'A part of the earth, but apart from it, gathering love about you, windsurfing on a williwaw, to a locale known only to God.' You write of life (or the loss of it?) with piercing vividity~ Exceptionally well done, poetess. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, sweet lady. Cor |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is excellent Corinne. . . showing the loss of life here. . . but also the fact that in the loss of life, there is the re-birth of the spirit. . . windsurfing the astral winds to find Eden. . . as always, you use the most wonderful and heartfelt images in your work. . .this is no exception. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you very much, Sven, as always, your comments are tender and thoughtful. Corinne |
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