Teen Poetry #5 |
In Love With You.... |
HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
“I love you,” three words they are, but the distance between before and after is far. Before good friends we were to each other, after I feel we are drifting apart from one another. Friends you struggle to remain, dancing in this endless game. How can friends we be, if secrets we must keep. You think you love him but you don’t tell me; you are afraid that that knowledge would hurt me. I like to think I am strong enough to be over you, but I just can’t seem to get the power to Give this love I have for you to someone else, feel for them what for you I have felt. My love for you was very strong, my recovery will be very long. When I am near you pain feel I may, to be so close yet so far away. But near you I want to be all the same for if you need me I wish to remain. As a friend or more I try not to care, as long as I can be there. Wish to love you I still do, to always be able to help you, For I am still very much in love with you. **************************************** I wrote this about a girl I am still very much in love with, even after she rejected me. I AM hopeless, aren't I? What can I say, I still want to be there for her, even if I receive nothing in return. Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually). [This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
aww....if you call that hopelessness then im Miss Hopelessness....this is really sweet i enjoyed it very much..you did really well with it..i found that it flowed pretty well in my head thanks! Daffodils |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
AWWWW i loved this poem i really did!! hehe but then again i think i loved all your work so far.. hehe kepe it up i love to read your work Andrea :exorcist:!~Andrea~!:exorcist: |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Don't say you're hopeless... Cause you're not... to not be over someone doesnt show weak character, it shows you trust yourself enough to let someone else love you... And not getting over someone right away means you're clinging to the thought that there will/might be a "you" again... and thats not BAD either... in good time you'll get her back/get over her... ALLIE |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
wow when did this one pop into your head? it was awesome. i know what it's like to be rejected and to have someone not love you how you love them. robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awww, no I understand what you mean, and you're not hopeless. Just give it time, one of two things are garaunteed to happen. she will get over herself and realize that she wants to be with you still, or you will get over yourself, and realize you need to move on. Either way, it'll take a while to heal your broken heart. Nice read! Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem. I've been there man and it is very hard. Stick through it cause most times it works out for the better. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
that was really good, things that come from the heart are always the best to write bout even if its hard to Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"My love for you was very strong, my recovery will be very long." Loved those lines. Thought the idea behind the poem is a sad, emotion-filled subject to write about...But when you began writing it, I think you tried a bit too hard to rhyme in some areas. Nice write all the same though, hope to see more. And hope that girl comes around... You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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