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Alysia182
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0 posted 2001-06-30 01:40 PM


He tells me to look at the sky,
When I am here crying.
He asks me if there are any last words.
I say I love you.
He says, you hate me.
And he tells me that this is the last time,
That I will ever get to say that to him.
So, please try not to lie.
I try to explain to him that I'm not.
He tells me about his theory.
That his life is like a video game.
Everything revolves around him.
No one is real except him.
Now, it is time to end this.
This stupid pointless video game.
I cry even harder.  
He tells me not to cry for him.
He is a mistake.
He is not worth it.
I tell him that he is wrong.
If he thinks he's not worth it,
Then what am I to him?
If he leaves,
Then what am I supposed to do?
I will have no one.
He tells me that he loves me,
And that I'm beautiful,
And not to ruin myself with drugs or anything.
But if he is gone,
Then nothing matters to me.
He doesn't understand!
Just because I'm not his girlfriend,
Doesn't mean I don't love him.
Because I do.
He says it's time for him to go.
I tell him to call me tomorrow.
But he never does.

**Somewhere over the rainbow, way up high....
There's a land that I heard of,
Once in a lullaby.**

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1 posted 2001-06-30 02:41 PM


Great work Alysia, I really enjoyed the read, hope to see more of you around and keep on sharing  
Andrew

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2 posted 2001-06-30 06:27 PM


I liked this Alysia.  
Keep posting.  

Suga_Baby
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3 posted 2001-06-30 06:35 PM


Ouch... this was really sad... But, on the bright side, it was good!

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Angel Bee
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4 posted 2001-06-30 08:15 PM


i liked this. keep writing. ab

*~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~*

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5 posted 2001-06-30 10:34 PM


wow, Alysia.  This is a pretty good poem.  The emotions here are thick, and I really liked the way you described the scenario.  Sounds like something I just went through only 2 weeks ago.  And those last 2 lines... frustrating, isn't it?  You want to get over it with all your heart, but you can't... even though he has so very easily.  *hugs* I know the feeling.  Time will mend hurts when it comes to matters of the heart... you'll be fine, I promise.  Just keep your head up    Good luck...

--Marie


You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 06-30-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-07-01 06:49 PM


I'm sorry to see that you're going thru such a bad situation.  I do hope things get better for you.  Be strong and keep your head up.  Thanks for the wonderful read.

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7 posted 2001-07-01 07:10 PM


Wow I'm so sorry this is happening to you. I liked the poem tho, it was very well written and emotional.   Keep it up..

Jenn

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

zarina
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8 posted 2001-07-02 02:30 PM


very,very good! I really enjoyed reading it.
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9 posted 2001-07-03 05:09 PM


I liked the poem. I thought you did well with it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Elvenblood
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10 posted 2001-07-03 07:40 PM


     By any chance is that about suicide?  Wow, that is heavy with emotion, very very sad, you evoke emotions well with your words, keep writing.

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

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11 posted 2001-07-03 07:47 PM


Awww... *hugs* I hope things get better! This is a good poem also. I think it's written well.  

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

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12 posted 2001-07-03 08:14 PM


quite the emotional poem...you wrote this situation clearly...as its a very hard one...hope things gets better ...and keep writin.

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