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All I could want
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All I could want |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
No longer, do I wanna be alone. No longer, do I wanna be un-loved. No longer, do I wanna cry. All I want, is something to be a part of. All I want, is someone to be there for me. All I want, is for him to take me high above. stupidity should be painful |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hmm..Interesting ending. A.) You could be talking about a lover. Or B.) You could be talking about God. WHo knows- I liked the mystery there. HeHe... I think the poem could most definetly be lengthened. This is a really good idea. I like the change form no Longer, to All I want. Nice write. You did wonderfully. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem but it's very sad. I hope things get better for you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I like this a lot. Short, sweet, and interesting.  Hope you find what you want.Jenn |
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