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Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

0 posted 2001-08-25 02:03 PM

Lurking in the shadows,
Hidden deep in the gallows.
Resting and waiting,
Watching the world keep hating.
Jumps out and to your shock,
Something grim appears on your block.
Darkness falls on those without souls,
Dark horrizons for whom the bell tolls.
Walking cautiously at all times,
As you listen as the bell chimes.
Nervous feelings fall upon you,
Now what can you do?
Sit and wait as the sun sets,
Across your neck something gently pets.
Mind body and soul,
I've been out of control,
Since I fell in this dark hole.
Do you love me do you hate me?
I guess we'll soon see.
Ready or not here I come,
Footsteps sounding like a drum.
Walking in the darkness of the streets,
Better hide under your sheets.
Death catches you in your sleep,
There's no hill to steep.
Cause Darkness Falls On Those Without Souls.

Only darkness falls on those without souls

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

1 posted 2001-08-25 02:55 PM

WOW. I really liked this. Especially the last line. Keep up the great work!

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-08-25 10:13 PM

*Twilight zone freaky music plays*
HeHeHe...
The beginning was okay...but the more I started reading the more into it I got. Thought you did very well on this one, thanks so much for freaking me out and hoping I don't have a dark soul. HeHeHe. Loved the poem.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

3 posted 2001-08-26 12:57 PM

hey, wow i loved this great job on this

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-09-03 02:19 AM

Well done here. I especially enjoyed the ending....the last line was awesome and very true. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Angelwings
Member

since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

5 posted 2001-09-03 02:37 PM

What a wonderful poem! It just says such a great theme. Thank you for sharing it. I loved the last line!

If we're told we're bad, that's the only idea we'll ever have. Maybe if we are surrounded by beauty someday we will become what we see.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-09-13 04:09 PM

"Darkness Falls On Those Without Souls."

Very strong statement
Hope we do shine the light on them
Excellent read my friend
keep it up

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anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

7 posted 2001-09-14 02:40 AM

Ok I initially laughed at the last line considering all the souls I have 'stolen'...

The piece itself is great and actually one of my faves from you. It goes deep into some interesting thoughts. Too many good lines to pick out and say WOW at.

Great write, keep them coming.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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