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a fable |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
an aching within my soul never seems to stop it's endless torture please allow these words their due and let me justify my enchantment. a velvety whisper, famailar to your ear does it hold some captivation? my secret is not compelling but is something i have not bestowed to you please do not interupt i have yet to begin... have i ever shared with you the experience of having you near a heat so intense,my very being is seared. the ebony depth of your eyes craddles me within a feathery embrace of affection something i can never bare to depart from. breathing seems insignifigant when i feel your caress my soft skin impacted for enternity. now do you understand my modest confession? these tenderly whispered words are they convicing you of feelings i long for you to understand. i must continue with this story for my bravery did not come easily as many times as this scene has been reherced. but my soul will no longer be tormented for i have found words to express what you envoke.. i love you "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow!  I really really really liked this bunches upon bunches! "breathing seems insignifigant" -Doesn't it though? You did SUCH a wonderful job on this piece...I'm so impressed! I don't believe I've read a write from you...so ya- I'll have to be on the look out for more posts from you. Hope I won't have to wait long. I loved the last stanza of this too. Very well done!You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 08-21-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
First of all... I want to express how impressed I am. I haven't seen you around here much, but after reading this poem, I hope you post again soon! "my secret is not compelling but is something i have not bestowed to you please do not interupt i have yet to begin..." That was one of my favorite parts. I like how you ask to please be quiet... don't say anything... I haven't said what i want to yet.. I liked that a lot. "the ebony depth of your eyes craddles me within a feathery embrace of affection something i can never bare to depart from. breathing seems insignifigant when i feel your caress" Wow.. that brings back such passionate memories... I once felt that. I miss it so much. I can't for the day to come back when I know that feeling again.. you described it perfectly. "but my soul will no longer be tormented for i have found words to express what you envoke.. i love you" A perfect ending... those were the parts that really stuck out for me. Beautiful post.. I cannot WAIT until your next... so keep sharing all your work with us.  --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
....wow.... |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is very powerful is left me speechless.Keep up the fantastic work! Lauren |
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