Teen Poetry #5 |
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upon looking through my parents Ford Expedition window in Cheyenne County |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me ![]() |
(por Ceniza, por sin no busco el Padre) through tinted glass the sun shines a certain shade of green that my desolate eyes has yet to see since age has taken me sometime ago (so long you know?) remember the waterfront shining a star as God gently lift it up shining the sun so strong and vibrant through the tinted wax of our eyes that was apparently applied by the grace of God to shine the sun a shade of green [May 26, 2001] xscoutx "Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16 [This message has been edited by scout (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
so my spanish is rusty, i haven't used it in so long... xscoutx |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
good stuff scout what is that a picture of? lol I know it's a little boy but is it you or just a random pic? I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
it was me, when i was younger, much much younger xscoutx |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
hee hee. that was scout last year. haha. j/k scott. i love this poem. very good. green is a rad color you know. you knew that. right. have a great day. dr. jo-bizz |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Nice title. For some reason I expected it to be a funny poem. But I guess you cant judge a poem by its title huh? Great job! *Amanda* |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done here. I really liked this poem. You are truly a wonderful poet. I loved the ending. The sun with a shade of green, wow I like the imagery of that one. I enjoyed this poem a lot. Keep posting! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The imagery in this whole piece is amazing.. The way you described the sun was awesome. Wowsers.. very well done, Scott. I really enjoyed this one. Oh, and I love your picture. Very original.. and cute ![]() Hope to see more soon! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is amasing scout... truely. It's been a while sinse I visited this place and this is the first poem I read when I got here. What a treat. Thanks for sharing 'Every body has their destiny... |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
muy buen hecho! continua a buscar el Padre y espero que continuabas a escribir para nosotros! (yeah i think my espanol gets the rusty award of the day... ![]() "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
well i understood what you said obscurity, so it can't be that bad... i just don't remember the grammar! I'm sorry about the misleading title, i just didn't know what to title it, and so i just titled it where I was. what's also neat was that it follows a little pattern... the first letters of each line goes ttt ss r ss ttt, just that was something interesting to point out, i don't know why i did that. Anyways thanks for your replies, i really appreciate it. I hope we all can see a Green Sun. xscoutx |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
uh..im still stuck on the "spanish" part.. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Great poem... EVEN rustier in Spanish...lol it's not very good AT ALL...! But I did like your poem. You're a great writer. Jenn |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
Geez, you stop speaking spanish for 4 years and this will happen to you, I just never had anyone to talk to in spanish in so long! I was going to ask someone, but then I thought well, people will get the idea... xscoutx |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a good write Scout. Your works have been very impressive keep it up and keep sharing thanks for the read hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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