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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
Lonesome feelings, Lonely dealings. Found my true love, An Angel from up above. Unseen for some while, Pick up the phone turn the dial. Wishing you were here to hold, If only I could have told. How much you mean to me, Wish I could make you see. You're the only one for me and all I see, Told me you love me and set my heart free. Sitting at home another lonely night, Wish you were here so I could hold you tight. Out with people I don't know, I fell pretty low. Missing you with all my heart, Why do we have to be apart? Sitting here on the floor kneeling, Searching this lonesome feeling. Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
hmmm...  i think someone is in.....erm LOVE! haha anyways this poem was sweet as well....keep up the good work  You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
yeah yeah its not a crime to be in love :P Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I agree, love is a good thing, but anyway, your poem was really good, I liked it. Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually). |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Okay if you have a certain way you wrote this than ignore me, I'm not quite focased tonight, but may I suggest revising the "I feel pretty low" to something along the lines of "I am feeling pretty low"? I dunno if I am making sense or what so don't pay too much attention to me lol. Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel. |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
Love is such a great thing to find...and finding the right person is so cool... I liked going through your poem Poet Unknown. It describes a real matter in life! And I do know how hard it is to lose the true love... Keep on writing and posting more because I loved these words and I'll be waiting for more   ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Sweet. Let's hope this next poem about whoever it is is a happy one too "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww, this is sweet. Nicely done! A sweet tribute.. I'm glad that you've found someone like this. You deserve it! Everyone does Good work.--Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this is a sweet one...i liked it a lot thank you! "Kiss my Starfish! |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Beautiful work...very heart felt and full of emotion. Lovely words. My favorite lines were at the end...the last 2. It worked perfectly. The mood you set was very well done. Keep up the good work! £êåh Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Yes, very sweet write indeed. And sad too...I know how ya feel here. Well done! You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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