Teen Poetry #5 |
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Fearful Fate |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
Everyone has a Mercyless fate, Waiting to see if God's going to blow the gate. Living in the ashes of Dreamless Ruins, And what I have is Stolen Fate. Look into The Eyes Of A Dragon, Sending Bloody Kisses From Me To You. With a Dark Angel Haunting You, You better fear the Dragon. Then Look Into The Eyes Of The Unseen Angel, Know your own fate. Cause True Enemy Lies Killing In The Highrise, Walk thru the darkness of an empty soul. See right thru it and set forth it's goal, Everyone has a Mercyless fate. Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This was pretty good. Not the best I've read from you, but pretty good. I liked the repetition of the first and last lines. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
well thanks, im not realy out to make somthin good but if i ends up bein good then its like cool if not oh well its just the moods im in when i write or my views on things, but thanks i appreciate the honesty Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I believe this is the first poem I've read from you...although my memory is now obsolete. hah. This wasn't bad at all. Your rhyming was well done. The flow was a bit off though, so it made it hard to read. Other than that, it was good. Till next time. ![]() -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
i thought it was good and interesting ![]() You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
thanks guys i appreciate it :O Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Kyle- I really really liked this! I thought it was very creative of you to start alot of the words with a capital letter. Thanks for the read! ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. very powerful poem here. The whole idea was creative.. I enjoyed it. I liked the whole dark and mysterious tone of the poem. The way you began many words with capital letters was creative, and put emphasis on those words. I liked that.. nicely done. I hope to see more soon.. --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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