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Ski*Chick
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0 posted 2001-06-28 08:58 PM


If I could see your face again
With your gleaming smile that never left your face
I'd be so happy

Your smile never did leave until the day you died
But all until there it stayed on your face
You meant the a lot to me

When you’d make me laugh with your jokes
When you make me mad because you wanted me to walk
When you loved me until the very end

I still think of that love between us
How we’d spend hours talking about thing that bugged us
I still wish I had you around to help me when I’m sad but I have friends now who do that

But the most thing I liked in you was your attitude toward everything in life
I always wanted your kind of attitude but I never got it until you died
Now I have a awesome attitude thanks to you

Love,
Minna  

Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same.

© Copyright 2001 Minna - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-28 09:14 PM


This is a beautiful poem, Minna.  The thoughts behind the poetry are very emotional.  Very sad poem... Hold those memories close to you.  You will cherish them more than ever in the future.
Nice work.  I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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2 posted 2001-06-28 09:59 PM


This is such an awsome poem because I can totally relate to everything you are saying in it.Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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3 posted 2001-06-29 12:58 PM


heartfelt poem ...very beautiful...enjoyed by me...bye Minna..

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4 posted 2001-06-29 07:48 AM


Very touching Minna. You always capture the most amazing emotions in your pieces.

Thank you for this.  

~AF~

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5 posted 2001-06-29 07:51 AM


Touching is  write I need a tissue...

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Ski*Chick
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6 posted 2001-06-29 11:53 AM


you see i have a disability and i didn't have a good attitude and I always wanted one like my dads because it wasn't as good. but now its so awesome   minna  

Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same.

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7 posted 2001-06-29 03:09 PM


That was really sad, but Im glad you got something good out of the loss of someone special.  Great poem!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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8 posted 2001-06-29 09:23 PM


This was a very emotional poem. I liked it a lot Minna. You are a very strong person.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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9 posted 2001-07-01 04:17 PM


Your poems are very heart felt Minna
All I can say is close your eyes and you'll see you father's smile again.  It's still there, you'll see  

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