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Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

0 posted 2001-08-06 07:33 PM

Consequences:

Confused events that will not happen
Persuaded emotions from scared results
I hope solutions will arise
And my mind laid at rest
Thought frightening images come to me
I hope not to confront at this time
Every precaution I took
Everything was planned and laid out
But the mind is always left to wonder
“What if?”
And in this questioning torture
I can only wait and see
The outcome of this event
Which I hope is not what I fear.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

[This message has been edited by Crash&Burn (edited 08-08-2001).]

allie
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since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

1 posted 2001-08-07 03:16 AM

Gees... obviously very emotional post...

None the less it made a wonderful poem...

ALLIE

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2001-08-07 03:18 AM

Nice job and i really liked how you expressed yourself

Good job!

Crash&Burn
Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

3 posted 2001-08-07 10:31 PM

lol I don't knwo why you say gees? did it shock you?
anyways thanx for sharing your thoughts I'm glad you liked it.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-08-08 01:38 AM

This was pretty good, C&B! I enjoyed it

Nicely done.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

5 posted 2001-08-08 01:41 AM

nicely done keep em coming!
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

6 posted 2001-08-08 03:17 AM

What is this, I see? No fart smiley at the end of the poem? Someone is slacking a bit, aye? LOL
"Every precaution I took
Everything was planned and laid out
But the mind is always left to wonder
“What if?”
I really liked this one. I was feeling it. Thought you did a great job.

Crash&Burn
Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

7 posted 2001-08-08 01:25 PM

there the farting smilie was added I apologize for it's tardiness lol

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

8 posted 2001-08-08 04:22 PM

Hey Jorge

I really liked your poem...how all these thoughts bombard your mind and how you wish for yer mind to just be at ease...I can def. relate and I think everyone can.
Good to see the less goofy side of you!
*ignores the farting icons*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-08-08 04:48 PM

Hey Jorge, well this is my last reply to one of your poems while being in PR. I liked this one. You did quite well on it. I hope things work out fine with you.
See you tomorrow in school as I stop by.

Adios man.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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