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mistic
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since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-08-05 12:46 PM

Ok I wrote this a couple of days ago for my boyfriend who's now in England or on his way to Scotland for vacation. I really miss him and he just left today. I know, I'm pathetic... oh well. His name is Sam, but I call him my Sammybear, thus the weird title. Anyway this is the free verse acrostic that I wrote for him. But some of the lines don't quite make sense.... and I don't know if the fourth line should be mesmorizing or memorizing..

Sweetly touched kisses
Always find their way to my lips
Making a deep hunger burn in my heart.
Mesmorizing each other during each passing moment,
Years will pass
Bringing us closer than ever.
Entwined in a blanket of love
Are we when the evening strikes where
Romance rules all.

I promise I'll never lose these wings of love that you have given me.

Lonliness will never come again
Over our grateful hearts,
Veils of love
Erase the past with a single touch.

Yearning for each other
Opens pages of books unwritten yet
Understanding our life together will be written there for the world to see.

As we lay here in each other's arms,
Lingering imprints are made on our hearts that
Will last forever,
Always will our love last through the
Years, even when death keeps us apart.
So I make my promise of always loving you and only you.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-08-05 01:20 AM

You're not pathetic! You're in love

There's a big difference, although sometimes it's hard to tell

I really liked this. VERY sweet idea. I, personally, love acrostics, so I really enjoyed this. Nicely done. I hope you give this to him when he comes home. I think he'd love it!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

2 posted 2001-08-05 06:10 AM

This so sweet Marie's right you should give it to him. It's not at all perthetic.
well done on this one.

katie

"by takeing no risks you are really risking everything"
Vic's RE book

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-08-05 11:05 PM

this was a sweet poem...i liked it...hope he comes soon, back to you, Stephanie.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-08-07 12:11 PM

I liked this alot! Very sweet indeed!
I liked how this line: "I promise I'll never lose these wings of love that you have given me.: was all by itself.... Nice write here.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-08-08 01:30 AM

I thought this was the sweetest. You should show it to him when he comes back. Sammybear? Haha that is the CUTEST....nobody calls me Javierbear.....more like MonkeyBoy or something.
Anyway, great job here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

6 posted 2001-08-08 03:24 AM

awwwwwww such a pretty poem!
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

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