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Hand Me Down Junior Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 32WV |
My sight finally returns only to see my hands covered with the innocent blood of those I stand before as an example I hold this ember in my heart it reminds me of who I was once Ember of Your faithfulness Ember of Your still small voice Ember of embracing arms Ember of rebirth To You my King I offer up this ember for the wind of Your Spirit to consume Consumed by fire to purge their blood from my hands. "Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I found this to be really nice. I liked the style and topic. Very original from what I'm used to reading around here. I really liked the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I thought this was very creative. I really liked the idea... I think you could expand on it a little more, but I really enjoyed this, nonetheless  Nice work, thanks for sharing.--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
very nice i liked this one a lot. robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this was very nicely done |
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