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Teen Poetry #5

All about love.... no title YET

allie
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since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

0 posted 2001-08-03 07:17 AM

Where's the hurt go when it fades?
Down like the sun or somewhere else?
Why's Happiness replace it so easily?
And melt away the ice.

When I'm with you there are no questions,
no right, wrong nor inbetween.
You took my past and set it straight,
Taught me how to live again.

And all the times I broke your trust,
You looked at me and still saw "us."
How wrong i was to doubt "our" strength,
How much i love you once again.

Now take my future by the hand,
Lead me where you think is best.
And watch as happiness replaces hurt,
Keep teaching me how to live again.

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

1 posted 2001-08-03 02:21 PM

Aww.. this is cute. Nice writing.

Jenn

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-08-03 02:52 PM

Very nice, Allie. Nice to see someone makes you this happy.
Thanks for sharing. You did a really good job.

~AF~

"Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

3 posted 2001-08-03 03:24 PM

I loved this!! Its going into my library right away! Great job.

I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-08-03 05:58 PM

I thought this was nice. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-08-04 06:54 PM

Wow.. I liked this a whole lot, Allie. It was hard to read, and not associate my own relationship problems with the words. Nicely done! I really enjoyed this... I loved the lines:
"And all the times I broke your trust,
You looked at me and still saw 'us.'"
Good job... I really liked this. Keep posting all your work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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