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Promises Broken |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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Promises made, Promises broken, Along with the heart, Of the innocent. She was so young, And so beautiful, But they all left her, In tears. She was so loving, But now she's so cold, For she can't love now, For all the hurt. Promises made, Promises broken, Along with the heart, Of the innocent. "A friend's shoulder makes a |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Tamma ~ Wonderful poem. I can relate to this so much. Probably in a diffrent way, but I loved it.  Great job here!!  What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Tamma-great read here. It was very emotion filled and quite beautifully expressed. Thanks for sharing! ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This is pretty sad....I really liked it though. Very nicely done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Yes, this is quite sad... but I liked the way you wrote it.. the repitions added to it. Good job here... Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a wonderful poem. I especially like the repeated stanza. It was very sad, but I still liked it a lot. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is sad. I really liked the way you repeated the first stanza to end the poem. Nicely done! I really enjoyed this. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
I am really loving your work, this is the 3rd poem now and the are just getting better. You should be very proud because you are a very talented poet!! This was another great read Tam!! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^  |
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Delirious_Smurf Member
since 2001-08-08
Posts 90Nothingness,P.R. |
I liked very much...specially the part they left ther in tears...eeek so sad, but good  |
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sean mani Junior Member
since 2001-08-06
Posts 27 |
very well written...hope to see more posts from u...meanwhile...check out my poems 'september 29' and 'revelation to december' sean |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
Hey that was great I can relate to that all the way. Hope to read more!! **Sarah |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i really like this one, it was sad though. but still great job here It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is so sad *comes down from high* i loved this one it's really good. katie "by takeing no risks you are really risking everything" |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Tamma, this is great! Sad, but totally awesome! Keep it up!  Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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California Rockstar Junior Member
since 2001-08-09
Posts 13State of Confusion |
I just had the last year of my life jump out at me from your poem. BRAVO! I loved it! If practice makes perfect, but noboy's perfect, why bother? |
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