Teen Poetry #5 |
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jaded Junior Member
since 2001-07-24
Posts 20 |
Confession (this poem is dedicated to a girl named Vari) ============================== There are some things in life that seem too hard to say but it stays in my head every moment each day grip onto my hand and I'll take you up high you resemble an angel - adorning the sky The greatest of cynics on love at first sight now the darkness has lifted, I've spotted the light a maiden so perfect, such pale soft white skin cant say that I love you - its time to give in From the first time we met, you emblazened my mind such powerful feelings I thought love was blind? The most beautiful girl - too good to be true? I finally know that I'm in love with you If it weren't for the gravity, pulling me down I'd be above everyone, floating around I'd walk across water then turn it to wine I'd do just about anything, please say you'll be mine |
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Jessica![]()
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
That was so sweet Jaded... I loved it. I hope to see more of your work... ![]() |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
This was a beautiful piece. I related to it quite well. Very Very sweet! Thanks for sharing ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The girl is pretty lucky to have somebody cherish her this much. Very sweetly written. I enjoyed it much. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awww! I agree with Dopey. Great job it's so sweet!! Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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jaded Junior Member
since 2001-07-24
Posts 20 |
hey guys ![]() thankyou for your kind words, its great to know that others have found enjoyment out of something i wrote, i hope i can write more that you will enjoy. thanks, i look forward to other peoples feedback aswell ![]() jaded |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
This was so sweet. I REALLY REALLY like it. The last 2 stanzas imparticular. Loved em. you expressed yoruself so well through this whole poem, and the last stanza, I know what you mean. How love makes you feel so impowered. One honestly believes they can do anything, conquer the world, turn water to wine. Excellent write. ![]() |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The last stanza was DEFINITELY my fave. VERY nice work! Very sweet poem. I'm sure this person cherishes you as much as you cherish her ![]() --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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