Teen Poetry #5 |
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Before I go to sleep |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
Sitting on a bench in a park with my girl Holding kissing fooling round, feeling like Romeo and Juliet in Shakespeare’s poetry world. Walking through the avenues and streets Soaking wet laughing together, girl grab your Umbrella and lets sing in the rain just you and me. Before I go to sleep I wonder how you feel, Wonder if your lonely, Before I go to sleep I always think of you, Think of your eyes so blue, Before I go to sleep. A cop of coffee on a Thursday afternoon Sitting talking telling jokes, with my friends The clock’s all most striking 3 so I will call you soon. Laying by the fire holding you in my arms Looking into your sweet eyes, through the night My head’s on your chest feeling the beats of your heart Before I go to sleep I wonder how you feel, Wonder if your lonely, Before I go to sleep I always think of you, Think of your eyes so blue, Before I go to sleep. Watch the ducks swim in the lake With you by my side On this snowy and cold morning Sitting on the bench just wasting time. With you. Before I go to sleep I wonder how you feel, Wonder if your lonely, Before I go to sleep I always think of you, Think of your eyes so blue, Before I go to sleep. |
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JBaker515![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
This was intersting, and i loved it. The story was pretty neat, and it had a good flow do it. SOrta orginal. Great work! ~Jeff~ |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
This was a nice one Hallucination. Very song-ish (is it a song or a poem?). Anyway, I loved it. -Kosetsu "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I think this is sweet. I also want to know, is it a song or a poem? Great one though! ![]() I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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~Dark Angel~ New Member
since 2001-07-21
Posts 5 |
i like dis poem, its cute, romantic and it's not about heartbreak !!!! =) |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is cute and kinda sweet. It's good to read happy poems. katie "by takeing no risks you are really risking everything" |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here Hall. I enjoyed it. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was well written. I ESPECIALLY liked the first stanza, where you're talking about feeling like Romeo and Juliet. Very nicely done! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I liked this poem a lot...thought u did a good job on it...keep em comin! yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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