Teen Poetry #5 |
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A bit of Heaven |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
Ok I just wanted to make it clear that this is just a poem about laying in your lover's arms through night in a blanket of comfort and then not wanting to leave when morning came because you knew it meant returning to work or school or whatever... nothing more and nothing extreme. Just had to make that clear so people didn't think i was talking about something else.. A bit of Heaven Take me to paradise, love, Where fantasy becomes reality With every sweet kiss. Warm flames burn deeply in our hearts And grow stronger With each devouring kiss. Light up the candles So that they may join In our night of contentment And dance their seductive shadows on the wall. Hold me there, tightly in your arms, As we caress soft skin In the flickering candlelight. While the world lies in darkness, We rest here in the glistening light. Moist lips explore each other As we come together in a loving embrace With a huge diamond moon Shining over us. One night is all I ask for To spend with you, So that we may wrap around us Endless blankets of love. Curse the morning that shines through our window With its song of the sun Bringing us to another reality Where things must be done. Just for one night though Or perhaps forever, Will you take me To that fantasy under the moon And in the flickering candlelight To touch a bit of heaven So I can linger there forever? |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
The felling of two lovers having possible one night together is a nice one to write about and you seem to have mastered it well. I wouldn't have gotten the wrong impression about this poem as you informed, it sounds pure and hearty to me. /Nick/ |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
this is wonderful, the title says it all...great work. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Steph...this was beautiful. Honestly. The description was breath taking... An absolute wonderful write here. Be proud of this. I enjoyed it bunches! |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Great write here... The description was great. Such a great feeling when you're with the one you love... I liked this piece. - Cody - |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was beautiful. Very well written and expressed. I enjoyed this one highly. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
See sweetie, you get nicer things said about your poems than I do, and you STILL don't believe me when I say your poems are good. :P lil doof ![]() "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ |
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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was so beautiful! The imagery was awesome all throughout.. wow, this is a very well written poem. Nicely done! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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