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DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

0 posted 2001-07-24 02:29 PM

My voice has been taken away from me.
A pencil and paper are all they left me.

I sit with a soft solem face.
With no words to speak it.

A million thoughts flow through my head.
And yet I cannot speak them.

I will write what I am thinking.
In words will I show my thoughts.

In many letters I will speak of Love-
I will show you the way of pain.

On my paper I will wrtie of compassion-
Of feeling of the forbidden loneliness.

I can write the beautiful letter of hope-
A tear I will shed to my paper to show sadness.

In many words will I scream.
Yelling of the voice I lost...still silent.

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

1 posted 2001-07-24 02:52 PM

Nicely done

It flowed really well.
Like they say, sometimes silence is the best answer.

-Leah

ps- nice title.

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-07-24 07:31 PM

And they always turn out so beautiful when written. I've realized lately that is much better to write your feelings than to say them...Because you can take more time on th writing...make them perfect.
I liked this alot. I've got alot of respect for you. You came in here and replied (Honest, thought out replies) before posting. I liked that. Hope to see more fomr you soon.

DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

3 posted 2001-07-24 07:44 PM

Hey thanks Spice, you just have a way of making me feel at home... your replies alot to me. I do try to be myself in my words as well as my writings. /Nick/

Hellseyes
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 120
Kansas, USA

4 posted 2001-07-25 11:54 AM

hey wan't this the one you wrote in math class, you really didn't have anything but a pencil and paper did you? this is a cool piece../Drew/

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

5 posted 2001-07-25 11:59 AM

I like!!!

What more to say???

DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

6 posted 2001-07-25 04:27 PM

Wow ever piece I write I seem to see more of different poeple respond, I think I'm actauly getting somewhere here and hellseyes nice to see ya' again... /Nick/

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-07-25 05:16 PM

I thought this was ok. I completely understand the title and the meaning of this poem. Well said, but I felt it lacked some depth and power that I have seen in more of your works. Regardless, I did enjoy this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Punk Angel
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

8 posted 2001-07-25 10:37 PM

wow. this was a great poem, it reallys opened my eyes to the secrets slience holds.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-07-30 03:48 PM

I really enjoyed this poem. You're really showing yourself in Passions... you're gaining lots of respect by not only posting, but replying as well.
I relaly like this piece, Nick. You write very honestly.. I like that a whole lot. Nicely done! I look forward to reading more from you

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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