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Kosetsu
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0 posted 2001-07-22 10:09 PM



I'll catch your tears when they start to fall
Stop each tear, one and all
When you need to cry on me, just call
And I'll catch each tear, one and all

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Thanks goes to Jessica #2 for
convincing me it didn't need a 2nd stanza.

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

© Copyright 2001 Adam Kamerer - All Rights Reserved
Isabel Galaxia
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1 posted 2001-07-22 10:15 PM


I like it.  The length makes it great

Bel

AngelPoet87
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Indy
2 posted 2001-07-22 11:34 PM


this is nice
DarkenedShadow
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Kansas
3 posted 2001-07-23 03:02 PM


Short and sweet. It rules !! /Nick/
Jessica
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4 posted 2001-07-23 04:50 PM


See... Told ya!! I really love it Adam, but then you already know that. *hugz*  

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

~sugarpie313~
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5 posted 2001-07-23 06:27 PM


i love this! the length, the message, it's just all around wonderful.  great job!!

Valerie

"...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva

Spice
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6 posted 2001-07-23 10:58 PM


It COULD be extended...but I think it's fine that length. Short, sweet, to the point. I liked it alot.
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7 posted 2001-07-24 01:35 AM


I think it's perfect just the way it is. VERY sweetly done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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8 posted 2001-07-28 07:32 PM


Very sweet, Adam!  I really enjoyed this.  The length is perfect.  Nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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