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Work of Art ( Soleil Moon Frye )
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Work of Art ( Soleil Moon Frye ) |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
Saw you for the first time on the TV, On Sabrina the teenage witch as Roxie. Hollywood actress big screen movie star I do not know which one that you really are. Don’t know the poet, But you are a work of art Can’t get over it, You’re more than straight from the heart. Kissed you goodnight on my TV screen, Told all my friends that I’ve kissed Roxie. Hollywood actress big screen movie star I do not know which one that you really are. Don’t know the author, But you are a work of art Can’t find any words, You’re more than straight from the heart. Searching the internet, For pictures of your sweet face. Hoping for an autograph Or a little pocket photograph. But frankly I don’t care all I know Is that you are way more than just beautiful. Don’t know the poet, But you are a work of art Can’t get over it, You’re more than straight from the heart. Don’t know the author, But you are a work of art Can’t find any words, You’re more than straight from the heart. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
This is nicely done, although your flow wasn't very smooth in some places. But no matter, I enjoyed it all the same. Thanks.  -Hael Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Very nice. Reminds me of "Girl on tv" by LFO and "Beauty on the tv screen" by Lou Bega.  Bel |
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Dylan Poe Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 13Illinois, USA |
Reads more like lyrics than poetry. Are you a songwriter? If your not you should try it, I think you'd be very good at it. If life's a stage |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I like this one, it keeps its form and holsd itself together. The whole actress part was a nice way to catch my attention. /Nick/ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought that this was pretty original but it wasn't my favorite. I enjoyed it though. Hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Hellseyes Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 120Kansas, USA |
this is a great piece...i can really relate to it..../Drew/ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
im confused. but hey whats new!lol good work Regina |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Regi - I am confused too! LoL I loved thecontent of this though. Well written!  What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
interesting... Fun... Really good actually! ALLIE |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hehehe..this reminded me of "girl on tv" too...i used to love that song till i played it over and over and over and got bored of the pop-iness of it all...i enjoyed this greatly though...like allyour lyrics...well done here.. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Just to echo Cherish, I liked the lyrics too. It read like something from Ash. It reminded me of a song called Girl from Mars even though this has no lyrical connection with it. Weird, huh?  Thanks for the read. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nicely done, Hallu. I enjoyed this. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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