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since 2000-08-12

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VA (U.S.A)

0 posted 2001-06-27 03:15 AM

I stare at the sky
on this rainy day, and dream
the dreams of flying.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-06-27 09:22 AM

it's raining here this morning too....gotta love it! Nicely done!

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

2 posted 2001-06-27 12:21 PM

Nice images here! Don't we all wish we could fly..

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2001-06-27 01:15 PM

Great work, Haiku is something I haven't written but I think I will give it a go. Thanks for sharing and a very enjoyable read.
Andrew

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

4 posted 2001-06-27 02:20 PM

3 liner lol good stuff.

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

5 posted 2001-06-27 03:34 PM

the time to fly
is soon at hand
my brother

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-06-27 07:13 PM

very expressive haiku. hope to see more. keep sharing

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

!!!
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since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

7 posted 2001-06-27 10:07 PM

SEA- thanks for reading. I wish it were raining here. (!!! really loves rainy mornings, and afternoons)

Chasing Rain- you wouldnt believe how many times i wished i could fly. Im glad you enjoyed my poem.

Marshalzu- im glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks for reading!

Acire- Thank you very much for reading. i will try to live up to my pen-name, and keep it expressive (but not explicit). I also hope i can get into the swing of things again. it seems ive been gone a long time...

the rescue- hey, just tryin to keep it short, and sweet ya know. Im glad ya took time to read it!

jose- always a pleasure. the time is closer than we both think!

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-06-27 10:46 PM

Hmm... this one got me thinking... and dream of the dreams flying. Awesome work! I really enjoyed this. Oh, and I love your user name

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

9 posted 2001-06-28 12:30 PM

wow!...i absolutly loved this one...so much in many ways...i can realte to this...very true and this is why i live...amazing haiku...hope to see more!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

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Riding

10 posted 2001-06-28 12:32 PM

I like this, but isn't this a senyru instead of a haiku? I may be wrong, but I thought haikus were about nature. Anyways, I like it,I like it!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

!!!
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since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

11 posted 2001-06-28 09:59 AM

Fading Away- Im glad you read, and enjoyed my poem. And about the user name, what can i say...thanx!

thanx for readin, and enjoyin!

Anonymous Albert- thank you for takin time out to read it. The poem came from experience, and it came from the heart. I just hope i can match it in my next haiku (or senryu, which brings me to...)

Skyfire- im so glad you like the poem. And as for it eing a haiku or senryu, im not really sure which it is. I always looked at anything with the whole 5-7-5 thing as a haiku (which shows that i gotta be on my toes about this stuff

) well, thanks for your reply!

Thank you for ALL your replys!

scout
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since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

12 posted 2001-06-28 01:22 PM

this one's nice and simple, to learn to fly, you mustn't be afraid to fall, i love rainy days, especially when you are on the island of sumatra and you can see it storm miles ahead on the waterfront, and it just slowly comes to grab you, i often see myself daydreaming in the storm.

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

!!!
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since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

13 posted 2001-06-28 10:33 PM

thanx scout for readin, and enjoyin it. And youre not the only one who enjoys rainy days. Only i daydream from inside my house on my couch, listening to music, and sleepin. (If you ask me, you cant ask for any better)

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

14 posted 2001-06-29 07:07 AM

Everyone can fly with the right things.

Thanks for making me remember that.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

15 posted 2001-07-01 10:35 AM

I wish I could fly, but, I enjoyed the poem, and hope to read more soon!!

-->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile.
-->Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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