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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-07-19 03:03 PM

BLACKNESS

The strength, the weakness
the fear the joy
Perhaps in this warrior;s
dim fate, the darkness
shall help him find his
way
His fear will fuel
his rage, his joye will
slow down his death march
He stalks a prey eager to
ravish the beauty he see's
such a contrast
she is so fair
yet he is so dark
impatient to collect his
prize, to satisfy his need
she is his trophy
she has no choice but
to surrender
no choice in becoming his
in mind, body and soul
This blackness crowds his
senses as his sword is plunged
deeper into his body.

Regina Levy

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-07-19 07:16 PM

Ina, another awesome one. Great Imagery. These lines were very nice
"His fear will fuel
his rage, his joye will
slow down his death march"
I don't know why, I just liked 'em. Great job.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-07-19 09:27 PM

I LOVED the ending to this poem. sinply AWESOME. Wonderful work, yet again, Regi. The images in this piece are fantastic! I really liked this one. Very very nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-19 10:54 PM

"This blackness crowds his
senses as his sword is plunged
deeper into his body."

awesome...great use of imagery as well...great work, Ina

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2001-07-19 11:44 PM

i liked reading this quite a bit regi...the images were awesome as usual...but i have to admit it didnt hold the same "ina power" as your other poems...still a great read though..thanx for sharing

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-07-20 10:29 PM

The imagery, OH the imagery!!

<--- Totally blown away. There is nothing that can be said to tell you how great this is so we'll just leave it like this.

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-24 08:26 PM

Great job on this one Regi. So dark, so black? ummmmm yea.
Well I liked it. well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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