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little_krazy_poet
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 41

0 posted 2001-07-17 04:13 AM

i want to be a kite
ya that is what i want to be
so once again i’ll know
what it’s like to be free

but the kite
it has a string
and this is
a vary funny thing

it lets is go
so vary high
it lest it be as free as it wants
until the end of the sky

but if it’s let go
it falls to the ground
or in a tree
not to be found

maybe i’m like a kite
but i must be fallen
not to ever
have any fun

wait i might have it
this is the thing
i just need someone to
hold my string

WRITE WHAT YOU FEEL!! AND DON’T LET ANYONE TELL YOU TO DO OTHERWISE

WHEN YOU LIVE, YOU DIE
WHEN YOU DIE, YOUR FORGOTTEN
AND WHEN YOUR FORGOTTEN

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-07-17 09:47 AM

Matt,
needing someone to hold your string...that is such a cool way of saying it! Very good writing, minus some spelling errors....

SEA

"Four be the things I'd been better without: Love, curiosity, freckles and doubt."
-- Dorothy Parker, on herself

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-07-17 02:10 PM

"i just need someone to
hold my string "

interesting way of discribing this...as SEA has said...i enjoyed the read, Matt

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-07-17 06:34 PM

Very interesting analogy. I enjoyed this. Nicely done

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-17 07:58 PM

Matt- This was very interesting.
I liked this piece.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-18 01:44 AM

Quite creatively written! I really like how you portrayed it all. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

6 posted 2001-07-19 02:12 AM

Awesome way of explaining it. I know how that is... I need someone to hold my string, too. I loved this one, good job.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

7 posted 2001-07-20 10:56 PM

How very true. That's all that anybody wants. I hope for you that you find someone to hold your 'string'.

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

8 posted 2001-07-24 12:21 PM

hey this is kool. i also lyk the metaphor. great job, keep postin.
-fear-

i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song

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