Teen Poetry #5 |
Don't Mind Me |
Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Don't mind me, I'm just a fool Trying to just Keep my cool And to not think About your eyes, Your hair, even Your tired sighs, And most of all Your perfect heart And of the ache Each time we part When daylight fades To night's embrace, Until my mind Begins to race With dreams of you; A fantasy, I'm just a fool, So don't mind me. ------------------------ Not my typical style..but hey, it's a poem, and the first in a long time... -Adam |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'm glad I check this out every once in awhile..funny stuff, kind of thinking about ya wondering what you were up to..writing I still see..and yes it might be a tad bit different from your regular poems but nonetheless you still got it Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Hmmm *thinks* I like your usual style better dude. I love the images you manage to come up with. This was well written though, and I did like the format. I just don't think it fits you, ya know? *hugs* miss you man. ~Rhonda #1 |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kosetsu- Well, I don't really know whether this 'fits you' or not, but I DO know that I like it. Very well written and I enjoyed the format. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
hey, since i really don't know wut ur "usual" style is, i'm just gonna say, keep it up cuz i liked this alot! ~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I like this Adam. This is different from your other stuff as I recall...but this is really well formatted. Simplistic and just really pretty. Nice one. Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
I love the phrasing. Dividing your thoughts into short segments really made the poem more real. Mahvelous, dahling! lol *~Meredith~* "I can taste you on my lips |
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