Teen Poetry #5 |
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Kevin![]()
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa ![]() |
Quixote chased windmills Egyptians, the sun Some men climb mountains Others wield guns Doctors give life Judges bring death Singers ride high on the waves of their breath Some stand on diamonds Drive faster cars Some reminisce in their street corner bars Search on the floor for their last weeks pay check Cheer for the home team Tip back their neck And we race And we race And we race to be first While quenching a lust And ignoring a thirst But you cannot race life When you stand in the crowd You can cheer as time passes Quiet Or Loud But no matter how good or how strong or how proud Time will never turn back It just isn’t allowed I'm on my feet, I'm on the floor, I'm good to go All I need is just to hear a song I know [This message has been edited by Kevin (09-11-2002 03:06 PM).] |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
hey! great poem. i really liked it ![]() allison |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
cute too! lol ![]() |
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Kevin![]()
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Thanks, *blush* but dont go looking through my old stuff, I'm still learning ![]() |
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layla Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 74 |
THIS IS JUST MY STYLE, I REALLY LIKED IT, AND U ARE CUTE,,,LOL |
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Riley![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Hey, I thought this was a good piece. I really liked the rhyming scheme. It flowed really well will the poem. This is my fav. line. While quencing a lust And ignoring a thirst. ( my spelling STINKS ) Anyways, great piece. Ri ~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~ |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
oh wow, this was so good, flowed well and there are some really clever lines in here, enjoyed this very much, anya |
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deadeyes Junior Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 33 |
I thought this poem was good..and the Quixote theme never seems to get old. I also liked your use of metaphors. A little uneven in terms of lines but then again poetry should be free versed. "Silencio..no hay banda..no hay orquesta." |
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